Sana Olivia Hernandez

Rookie - 499 Points (3*31*99 / Roseburg, Oregon)

Drunken Smoke - Poem by Sana Olivia Hernandez

Alcohol and Cigs,
Have become too big.

One's for stress,
The other's for pain.
But you lose more than you gain.

Your control,
Your faimly,
Your health,
Your possible wealth,
And soon your life,
Will all wash down the drain.

Is this what you want for your children to aim?
The companies are to blame.

Drugs do worse if not the same.
Do you really want to play this game?

Just stop.

-SOH


Poet's Notes about The Poem

I hate cigarette smoke and I refuse to drink alcohol of any kind.

Comments about Drunken Smoke by Sana Olivia Hernandez

  • Gold Star - 10,015 Points Daniel Brick (9/24/2014 5:08:00 PM)

    This could have been a long poem, a very long one, as the third stanza shows, but you end it abruptly with the commanding statement - JUST STOP. That's a perfect strategy. You have already listed the negative things indulgence will cause, so that part of your mission is done - on your part as the concerned witness. Now it''s their
    turn, which you make very clear by falling silent after JUST STOP.. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, September 4, 2014

Poem Edited: Thursday, September 4, 2014


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