Treasure Island

RIC S. BASTASA


editing bukowski, without his permission


i

Long walks at night-
that's what good for the soul:
peeking into windows
watching tired housewives
trying to fight off
their beer-maddened husbands.

ii

(i am a minimalist, how about removing the last line,

ok, i will try)

Long walks at night-
that's what good for the soul:
peeking into windows
watching tired housewives
trying to fight off

iii

(hey, how about removing the first line,
the long walks are not really necessary,

ok)

that's what good for the soul:
peeking into windows
watching tired housewives
trying to fight off


iv

(hmm
why not remove the third and fourth,
it sounds good to me...

yeah, i will)

that's what good for the soul:
watching tired housewives


v

(what about using only one word
to make the poem
very brief?

ok.. i will leave the most important one)





-nothing follows-

Submitted: Monday, December 14, 2009
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