I Wish Poem by Anjali Singh

Like the storyline...The work has much value and even more potential...You (imo) are utilizing too much un-necessary in-line punctuation, in particular, the employment of Ellipsis, or otherwise known as the 3 dot symbol(...) This symbol, if you are not already aware, is the Author telling the Reader to stop & pause, before continuing...It is usually used as an impact device so as to enforce the importance of the words preceding those 3 dots...However, if it is used too often, it could result in a choppy, start and stop read, and in the process you lose your Readers interest or understanding of the work...Punctuation can be extremely useful when placed in appropriate locations...Fluxed structural movement is paramount in all forms & formats of prose and or poetry....A smooth, whisking read can even take a mediocre work, and be made to appear far better based on its smooth structural flow alone...In the case or your poem...the expression, and interest is there, along with a nice, tight and crisp construction...Keep that pen pumping...You have a handle on the hard part of good poetry...the grammatical end is simply practice & proof-reading out loud to your own ears.~FjR~