Imperfect Solution Poem by YURI DURAAN

Imperfect Solution

Rating: 4.7


I starved and lost 10 kilos because you said
I was fat.
You did not acknowledge it because it was not
Absolute goal weight.

I trained and ran 21 kms because you said
I was lazy.
You did not acknowledge it becauase it was not the
Ultimate Human Race.

I make your breakfast every morning because you say
I am useless.
You do not acknowledge it because it is my
Wifely duty.

I continuously plan my suicide because you say
My life is worthless.
Of course, you would never acknowledge it because it probably would
Not be perfect.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Antonio Liao 19 September 2008

sometimes our solution lacks the wisdom to see beyond... its end..good that you have made a poem that say what is reality.... i am reminded... thank you my friend...wonderful indeed a 10/10

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Mattie Jay 18 March 2008

wow yuri, this is such a strong piece, your raw honesty speaks volumes which is backed up the imagery that is impressed upon me. such a sad yet inspiring poem. I can relate to this on many levels

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Gershon Hepner 09 December 2007

Neat poem. A bit heavy at the end when you talk about suicide, which I hope is not serious and, if not, gives the poem a weight I don't think you want it to have.

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YURI DURAAN

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