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Glimpses of you keep chasing
the corners of my eyes.
That I'm trying to evade you;
one could easily surmise.
I see you in the corners
of streets I used to walk;
in faces of people
who want to stop and talk.
So, I'm putting up my walls;
solid mortar and bricks.
Gonna hole myself in
just for giggles and kicks.
But the walls don't faze you;
You know how to break in.
You've snuck into my veins;
you're swimming deep within.
Roshni D'Souza
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Thursday, May 28, 2009 |
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Tuesday, June 02, 2009 |
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Comments about this poem (Intrusion
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Roshni D'Souza
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Ted M (6/29/2009 11:31:00 PM)
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You have beautifully expressed the feelings and the turmoil at the young age.
10+++
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Sarvesh Kulkarni (6/7/2009 1:59:00 PM)
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yes....
amazingly expressed...with a slight contempt and some surprise.
precise.
beautiful.
thank you.
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Shashendra Amalshan (6/3/2009 2:49:00 PM)
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wow i liked these expressions
'So, I'm putting up my walls;
solid mortar and bricks.
Gonna hole myself in
just for giggles and kicks'
these a strong..effective beautiful write indeed..thanks for this one Roshinee..enjoyed it..felt it to the core of my heart too..moved...nice one A++
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Raj Arumugam (5/29/2009 11:50:00 PM)
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love the rhythm in this poem...
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Rory Hudson (5/29/2009 10:46:00 PM)
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Very nice one Roshni, I like the simple rhyme scheme.
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Kesav Easwaran (5/29/2009 4:18:00 AM)
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nicely expressed...sweet love poem Roshni...i liked...10
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