when the sun descends,
and the day ends,
I loook at the sky,
to say GoodBye
GoodBye sun,
and also fun,
and welcome the moon.
it's time to with night,
to tell it all what you want,
and dont let it go,
till you finish all what you know.
then say GoodBye and wait for th sky,
till i come bright again
then say HI
welcome the bright sky..
poetic and good imagery. ---------------- however, i think there is a typing error in this line: 'then say GoodBye and wait for th sky, ' i think it should be 'then say GoodBye and wait for the sky, ' typing errors are common. There are poems of mine that also have them and i wish someday i can spare a time to review all of my poems and correct all grammars, spellings, and other... God bless... Advanced Merry Christmas!
Nice to read your poem! Go on writing poems for further development in this line!
an impressing rendition. writing is said to be a daily thing. keep writing!
A very innocent effort my friend, the many a kind I love to read.I am quite prone to mistakes myself..... thank god for editors :) . Keep up the good work sunshine poet, I shall look forward to your next rise (Line) James
Beautiful Poem.... :) Your poems have a well defined sweetness
Nice write but i feel it hadn't done enough justice to its title.
oh that is the boundary of our time for all our works to trudge the path of of life, beautiful write, i0+, thanks for sharing
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
hi.. welcome to the bright sky.. a new poem has shined on the planet of poetry.. wish you good luck..