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10.0
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I thought of you today,
all day,
you never left.
And like a lovely sound
you echoed in the cleft
between my hemispheres,
we walked, homebound
as raindrops kissed
anointing you
your feverish skin,
and soaked
the cotton of
two little teddybears.
There was the sea,
its gentle rhythm
sang exotic songs,
your grip was firm
as if you did not yet believe.
My stride was bad,
we bumped
not minding though
the potholes of the dunes,
and talked about how very sad
that time had left behind
our legacy of spoons.
The wind was very kind,
it covered a hoarse voice,
what occupied my mind......
the horniness of boys.
It stirred the passive sand
and cooled a fever spike
I took your other hand
one finger in the dyke.
Herbert Nehrlich 2
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Wednesday, August 05, 2009 |
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Tuesday, June 07, 2011 |
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Comments about this poem (Of You
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Marieta Maglas (8/26/2009 8:14:00 AM)
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nice simile:
''And like a lovely sound
you echoed in the cleft''
well embedded into this wonderful lyric poem..........10++++
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MARK L. BERRYANN (8/18/2009 11:13:00 PM)
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What a great atmosphere you surround the reader with...I could smell the salt beach sitting here at home and longed to be where you were in this poem....Very very touching poem!
Voted a 10!
Mark Lewis Berryann
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Shashendra Amalshan (8/15/2009 4:16:00 AM)
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Hey this is beautiful, nice to read indeed.. lovely and very moving...
Language is very free flowing and I was kinda moved too..
hey there are some sweet and cute expressions too..
loved reading this one..
lovess
shan
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Onelia Avelar (8/8/2009 2:51:00 PM)
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'you echoed in the cleft
between my hemispheres'... I like the way you localize the place where memories occures, who else except a poet would think about it... Very tender read, enjoyable...
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Fay Slimm (8/5/2009 6:14:00 AM)
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Wistful but still enchanting and very readable......10 plus....
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