When a girl never seduced
Called the loner, my self-esteem reduced
Always left aside to watch and weep
Can't count how many times I cried myself to sleep
Without knowing, I became easy
For every man who was far too cheesy
Felt happy at night when between ones sheets
Sad the next day, when back in the streets
Something had to happen, then and fast
I had to make this present my shameful past
Though I can't change the reputation that's stained
I changed my life and my pride was regained
brilliant thoughts dear! ! ! you spazzed thats reality you have potraiyed coz a lot of girls figure it all wrong nice work keep it up
Those who have chosen the wrong path, can change themselves very easily, if they have the will power, though their stained reputation is hard to be changed. Ultimately people may forgive and forget, even a hooker had been blessed as a saint in the History of Christian Saints which I used to hear during our prayer times in my school days year after year.
Not too sure about this, the motives are fine, as is the moral position at the end, but some of the rhymes are very heavy and contrived, easy and cheesy tend a bit to the comic, or is it so intended? and I am misreading this...
Nice rhythm. A little sad but glad the girl’s pride was regained.
Bold expression of genuine feelings of n honest soul. I admire the brevity with which feelings were let out. It has most of the qualities of a readable poem. Nice write.
I loved this poem by Charlotte Eyre. I thought the title 'Past Aside' was brilliant as an introduction to the catchy clever lines, When a girl never seduced/ Called the loner, my self-esteem reduced. Charlotte then raised the tension stakes with the play upon the title left aside with a sad heart tugging Always left aside to watch and weep/ Can't count how many times I cried myself to sleep. The tragedy of heart wrenching loneliness justifies and explains the moral slip of falling into an easy lay Without knowing, I became easy/ For every man who was far too cheesy. This adds pathos extra sympathy for the innocence, which is taken used and abused by cheesy men. Who cannot understand the pull and compensation of surrogate love, in place of real love and the loneliness, Felt happy at night when between ones sheets/ Sad the next day, when back in the streets is a further expansion, upon the misuse of innocence by cheesy men who use this young girl then throw her away. But can a young heart continue with such abuse or will respect and self esteem demand an eventual life change. The answer is yes Something had to happen, then and fast/ I had to make this present my shameful past and again the line is succinct witty and clever. If the poem is intended to have an interesting redemption moral, how could it be written in an entertaining concluding punch line way. The final stanza Though I can't change the reputation that's stained/ I changed my life and my pride was regained warns, that nasty judgmental people will gossip but not forgive or forget easily. The brevity and simplicity of this poem is masterful, some might read and think that such vernacular diction is simplistic, they would be wrong! This poem is a wonderful read it and weep moral lesion with a nice rhyme scheme aa bb cc dd ee aa.10+++ Charlotte :)
reinventing oneself for improvement and better quality of life is a really good idea...good poem..rhymed right through..
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
This is an amazing write! Filled with regret, yet self-awareness. I admire your courage to face your demons and devils, your punisher and rewards. Great Ink Charlotte! -Kelly - Please read my words at your leisure. -Kelly