Punishment Poem by Asif Baloch

Punishment

Rating: 5.0


Unwanted feelings
Destroyed thinking
Shattered breaths
Inhaling tears
Exhaling pain
What I have become
I’m unable to explain
Wanting to be touched
Asking to be loved
That’s the sin
What I made
If not loved
At least lend me hate
Hate me from the
Depths of your heart
Hurt me, hit me and kick me
Like unwanted stone
Laying in the middle
Of your path
Ask me, force me
To free that shattered soul
From my unworthy body cage
Hold it, grab it, squeeze it, tore it
Like useless piece of meat
A colt lying in my chest
Just shading tears of blood
Night and day
Help me, save me
From the whips of feeling
And lashes of thoughts
A punishment of fate
Put on me for eternity

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Clum Haire 20 September 2008

Thanks for your comment! This poem is really good, the short lines lend themselves well to the emotional style. Its almost like when people are sobbing and its hard to breathe. Its really effective and even though its got the odd clichee in it, I barely noticed. I'd give it 10

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