Then there you are in the soft rain,
Every thing smells new all around you.
As the fish in the pond swim all around me,
Frogs to be who are not yet cannot love me.
Cardinals bathe in the smallest of pools,
Happy to sing of life.
The current war will never stop, stopping
Would mean there is peace.
Those I mean they who watch us from space,
Could careless if we became extinct.
As winter turns into spring and summer to fall,
With no one left here to care.
well done mixing the world of fantasy with reality, on the other hand the multiple meaning and interpreting of this recent poem tell us how you are different and giving the words a new life, this kind of works reminding me with Paz, Poe, Rimbaud, ....etc scored 10 by me...thanks
3 – " ..they who watch us from space, " are extraterrestrials OR other humans? ? or both? stanza 5: though " careless" IS a good word, it isn't here. Use " care less" (separate words) . my goodness, James does not use " green" as a topic this time! bri :)
2 – After reading the whole poem, i wonder if (in the 2nd stanza) the " me" is lying dead in a pool of water, being a war casualty. so, tadpoles can't love the 'speaker'. : (
1 – As James forewarned me, his poem is fashioned after one by a long-dead poet. the only difference between the titles is that Sara Teasdale used " Rains" & JM used " Rain" . i suggest readers read Sarah's [[ OOPS! it's " Sara's" ]] poem also.
The current war will never stop, stopping Would mean that there's peace......touching expression! A significant write.........10
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
When rain falls on Earth, soil smells very sweetly. Rain motivates mind in amazing way. This is definitely very interesting sharing done here really.10