Unholy Feminine Saviour Poem by Josh Terpening
Unholy Feminine Saviour
Unholy Feminine Savior
Pale, white lightening shatters traceable trails and patterns - these are instantaneous flashes of pathways of pain, wrapped rather hideously in a pleasurable package. We split our backs and bruised our knees and clasped our chapped palms
And kissed the dirt mount ground.
Lift your weary head, Son, and smile that muddy smile.
You've been blessed now by our homemade god from scratch. The divine murderer,
The heavenly rapist, the sacred thief - and just then the ground rumbled
And there split a fault line; ten million lost souls sang like wounded cicadas!
"HE IS COMING AGAIN! " They shouted in disharmony.
"Who is this Spiritual beast? And what shall I call His Highness when I see Him face to face? "
A sweet voice from within whispered clearly as if in a lullaby,
"I am Euphoria. You know me well."
Whoa this poem is hard to even know what to say about it. GOOD: I seriously liked the vocabulary and the drastic emotional language in it. The conflicting ideas within the characteristics of humans are very clever, i.e. (divine murderer, heavenly rapist, sacred thief) . BAD: Within the vague harmony there needs to be some clarity. When the reader finishes reading they should deserve to understand a bit of what is happening. The way this poem is written now doesn't supply that. It also had a sad lack of rhyme scheme and should I ever refer it to someone to read I would call it a lyrical verse instead of a poem for that reason.
I like the way you created the suspense till the last line of the poem. A well articulated and nicely penned piece. Thanks for sharing. Please read my poem MANDELA - THE IMMORTAL ICON.
I like the way you created the suspense till the final line of the poem. A well articulated piece of poetry written with insight. Thanks for sharing. Please read my poem MANDELA - THE IMMORTAL ICON.
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I would like to translate this poem
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...having been there one's self...or seeing it happen to those closest to you...it's easier to immerse yourself in this verse...I love it!