Theodora (Theo) Onken

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Your Golden Pen - Poem by Theodora (Theo) Onken

Entangled in the depth of your blue eyes
...Entranced and in total bliss...
Embraced by your circled arms tight grasp
...Energized by your heavenly kiss...

We two are as a gift package
...Gift papered and tied with silk bow...
A grand presentation of sheer quality
...Of the sweet you that i have come to know...

...And in the background, playing...
...An Aussie Minstral and his music men...
Continue this moods amazing altruisms
...With a: 'Giving Melody'-written with your...
Golden Pen!


Comments about Your Golden Pen by Theodora (Theo) Onken

  • Theodora Onken (5/6/2016 6:43:00 PM)

    Pamela, thank you so much for your awesome, enlightening review. You are so very appreciated by me. (Report) Reply

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  • Pamela Sinicrope Pamela Sinicrope (5/6/2016 8:39:00 AM)

    I love the metaphor of a loving couple being a gift wrapped package! That is so true. Receiving such love is a true gift. Lucky couple. Personally, I love poems that use Verbs...I think it energizes the writing and engages the reader. I felt the love encircling me. Romantic, with the music in the background.....love music that was crafted with the lover's golden pen. A bit schmaltzy in the best romantic way...loved it! (Report) Reply

  • Susan Williams Susan Williams (5/2/2016 9:51:00 PM)

    Oh! I didn't see this until after I read it and scrolled up to reread. That is why those introductory lines are as smooth as silk, soft as a breeze, and set the stage for romance. The four all start with words beginning with the letter E, words that sound like a moment in love....that entangled and entranced, embraced and energized. Such a subtle way to get the reader in the mood for dancing away in a romantic haze! Clever girl! The entire poem is a yummy in our starry hearts! As Melvina says- -a serving of literary delight! (Report) Reply

  • Dr.tony Brahmin Dr.tony Brahmin (4/20/2016 7:38:00 AM)

    Entangled in the depth of your blue eyes
    ...Entranced and in total bliss...
    Embraced by your circled arms tight grasp
    ...Energized by your heavenly kiss... very fine introductory lines. for your poem. this is a very nice poem. thank you dear poetess. tony (Report) Reply

  • Edward Kofi Louis Edward Kofi Louis (12/20/2015 5:09:00 AM)

    Of true love that i've come to know. Nice work. (Report) Reply

  • Melvina Germain Melvina Germain (10/16/2015 10:35:00 AM)

    An amazing serving of literary delight, just as I remembered your work to be Theo..... (Report) Reply

  • Tushar Ray Tushar Ray (3/24/2015 11:54:00 PM)

    Excellent poetic expression of emotion, affection and love! Very enjoyable! (Report) Reply

  • Ramesh Rai Ramesh Rai (8/11/2014 8:53:00 PM)

    Written with your golden pen.
    Entangled in the depth of
    your blue eyes
    ...Entranced and in total
    bliss...
    Embraced by your circled
    arms tight grasp
    ...Energized by your heavenly
    kiss....Perfectly soothing and enchanting. (Report) Reply

  • Amitava Sur Amitava Sur (6/20/2014 9:25:00 AM)

    A very pleasant mood is drawn which enchants the mind..... very nice (Report) Reply

  • Theodora Onken (10/3/2009 6:05:00 PM)

    Patricia, thank you so ver much for your very kind words.
    Many blessings to you.
    Theo (Report) Reply

  • Patti Masterman (10/3/2009 10:38:00 AM)

    This is just beautiful, Theodora. Glad I noticed you. Your poem perfectly is matched with a beautiful Fall day. (Report) Reply

  • Theodora Onken (8/20/2007 4:07:00 AM)

    L, A, M, P, And M, Thank you all so very very much!
    Theo (Report) Reply

  • Lawrence S. Pertillar (8/20/2007 3:27:00 AM)

    It's been a while since I've observed your style with such magificent classiness...
    Ms Theo, you drive me wild! (Report) Reply

  • Andrew mark Wilkinson (8/20/2007 2:54:00 AM)

    Beautiful write Theodora, good to have you back again lady... Andy (Report) Reply

  • Michael Buhagiar (8/20/2007 2:53:00 AM)

    A beautiful poem Theodora. Well done. (Report) Reply

  • Poison 9901 (8/20/2007 2:49:00 AM)

    I to agree with Melvina, very nice.
    'Keep on inking the Pages'
    Poison (Report) Reply

  • Melvina Germain Melvina Germain (8/20/2007 2:42:00 AM)

    A truly beautiful poem written with your golden pen Theo, I love this little treasure.
    --Melvina-- (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, August 20, 2007

Poem Edited: Wednesday, March 30, 2011


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