1 Minute Poem by Chyna Hughes

1 Minute

Rating: 4.5


Hell Yea Id Commit Suicide
Cause Nobody Cares
But Before I die
I Have A Minute To Spare......

60 seconds:
To tell you I hate you...
as evidence of all the pain I went through

50 seconds:
Because you didnt even care...
what you did, man it wasnt fair

40 seconds:
For you to leave me alone...
Youve over stayed your welcome
Please be gone!

30 seconds:
Times almost up...
Go plan my funeral.ENOUGH IS ENOUGH! ! ! !

20 seconds:
And im really gettin mad...
pass me that knife...its part of the plan

10 seconds:
No one to say I love you
NO hugs, NO kisses NO ill be thinking of you

0 seconds:
BECAUSE NOBODY CARED
NOW IM IN HEAVEN WITH NO MORE TIME TO SPARE!
i just hope you know its all your fault
now im resting in peace and my presence is forgot..=[

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Nathaniel Booker 04 September 2008

You're a talented writer Chyna, I'd suggest writing on the global spectrum, meaning life really throws topics at your feet. Also, if you take away the life that you are unable to create, I don't think God will be pleased and grant you a immortality... I just firmly believe it doesn't work like that. I say this because I've been there and had those feelings... I won't say more on the subject except that... Life offers possibilities and change... Death on the other hand is final. Be Well Young Star,

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Lawrence S. Pertillar 07 April 2008

The premise of this poem is depressing since one so young would harbor such 'final' thoughts. However, the structure and content depicts a budding talent. I can not say I 'like' the poem because it goes against my 'idealistic', sarcastic, cynical nature. And one would have to be full of life to enjoy inflicting those moods upon the tolerance of others. Good job, Chyna.

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Bill Smith 06 April 2008

liked it, clever idea in the layout, take it you are still with us smiffy

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Ivan Donn Carswell 06 April 2008

1 Minute is a powerful example for your first published poem. It suggests your next offering, given one can write and post poems on PH while in Heaven (- can't think why not, there are examples here which clearly originated in some members' private version of Heaven's antithesis, Hell) will be equally as powerful if not better! I will be looking forward to it. Rgds, Ivan

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Chyna Hughes 06 April 2008

plzzzz leave comments this is my first published poem and ii wuld juss like to know someones opinion on it

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