3am Poem by MaddiiAnne O'Leary

3am



The quietest time in the night.
The worst time to be awake.
This time is 3am.
At this time even wolves sleep.
This is when people crash when driving.
This is when peopel make the worst mistakes.
This is when simple things become impossible.
It is the time of dreams.
The dreamscape is a nightmare.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
sxc babe xxx 21 June 2010

yerr hay its soo bad wakin up at that time ii hate it its a madd poem

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R. H. Peat 16 June 2010

Well Maddy, An interesting poem: the ravenous wolf of night that chases after us. Yes they can plague you at times. I've been there when working late at night on the 'Graveyard' shift. So aptly named I guess. And the dreamscape is a nightmare for sure. I like the use of the anaphora within your poem. Nicely done. You might shift the lines around a bit to get all the music you can get out of the lines by enjambing the (at) and then placing the lines under each other. Like so: The worst time to be awake at— This time even wolves sleep— This time is 3am.(in mock-dawn) This is when people crash when driving. This is when peopel(sp) make the worst mistakes. This is when simple things become impossible. This way you get the full benefit of your lovely music in the anaphora with the words 'this time & this is' both starting with 'this'. Mind you, this is just a suggestion. Lovely poem and the intent is very powerful. Their are many that work late in the evenings. I used to start my day 12: 00 midnight and end it at 7: 00 am when I was in my 20's, that was about 50 years ago. I didn't think you had Wolves in Australia. I thought you just had Dingos over there? But I liked the use of the image within the poem it's metaphor stands out sharply with so few images in your poem; in this case, it works very well. I once wrote a poem about the 5 wolves, a few years back, that came in the dark when driving. That poem dealt with possible accidents as well. But actually the wolves were the 5 passions. But the storyline of the poem was about diving in the snow with the wolves chancing the car. a poet friend RH Peat

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