Eyan Desir

Rookie - 15 Points (caribbean)

... ☻ A Deal With The Devil (Dark) - Poem by Eyan Desir

Foolish ambitions
The greed of gluttons
Dissembles the heart
Desires burn flesh
Summon him from the dark
Come forth minion of evil
Give your gift to him
Fulfill his heart fantasies
At the end of the river
Drink a stream of pain
Devil's gold is sweet
All who come to take
Will be fed with juicy lies
Fool there is no escape
A deal is a deal
You must pay its price

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Comments about ... ☻ A Deal With The Devil (Dark) by Eyan Desir

  • Gold Star - 50,465 Points Chinedu Dike (5/28/2015 7:52:00 PM)

    Repercussions of evil well depicted in the poem. A well articulated piece of poetry that reminds us of Karma - the law of Retributive Justice. A lovely poem insightfully penned with conviction. Thanks for sharing. Please read my poem MANDELA - THE IMMORTAL ICON. (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie - 274 Points Kesav Easwaran (11/7/2009 8:29:00 AM)

    'Devil's gold is sweet'...
    perhaps the devil knows it best! ...a sweet work on devil and its gold...thanks (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 1 Points Swatimalya Chattopadhyay (11/1/2009 9:18:00 AM)

    A devil should not emanate out of our ambitions and greed, in order to devour our values.Extremely nice poem with good imageries of thoughts. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 71 Points Indira Babbellapati (11/1/2009 2:13:00 AM)

    devil is the dark side of self, i suppose... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 116 Points Mal Sharp (10/31/2009 6:34:00 PM)

    Beautiful imagery, put pictures in my head, very well written, good choice of words. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 20 Points Mehreen Mujeeb (10/31/2009 2:28:00 PM)

    wow, very intense. thought provoking expressions. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Elsee Daniel (10/31/2009 1:01:00 PM)

    its a thought provoking poem 10+ (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 27 Points Connie Tallada (10/31/2009 7:05:00 AM)

    so meaningful and touching..tnx for this poem eyan (Report) Reply

  • Rookie özLem Tunca (10/31/2009 3:48:00 AM)

    it realld did touch my heart..
    thanks for wiriting :) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Rex Mathew Mathew (10/31/2009 3:01:00 AM)

    Cool. ' at the end of the river', ' drink a stream of pain', ' fed with juicy lies'
    You use words very wisely. We must of course ultimately pay the price for all deals we make with the devil, for all days we have each become a ' minion of evil'.
    Nice write. Brilliantly impressive. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Gracey Newman (10/30/2009 2:40:00 PM)

    This is cool, I also write dark poetry you should go and take a look :) 10 from me! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 42 Points Obinna Eruchie (10/30/2009 5:21:00 AM)

    To make a deal with the devil and to have your desires fulfilled as you want it is all an illusion. When such is fulfilled, you discover to your chagrin that it is all a disappointment and you will find yourself in a realm of condemnation and damnation.

    Fascinating to read. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 1 Points Shamik Bose (10/30/2009 4:09:00 AM)

    fantastic... a perfect 10 (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Seema(Aanamika) 80 (10/30/2009 3:23:00 AM)

    Fantastic poem &im nt at all scared bt i loved reading it...10++ (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Seema(Aanamika) 80 (10/30/2009 3:23:00 AM)

    Fantastic poem &im nt at all scared bt i loved reading it...10++ (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Tanesha Davenport (10/29/2009 5:59:00 PM)

    great peom very kool...i like thats all i write is dark peoms...i tried to write happy ones but they sux my dark peoms have emotion...but i loved it! ! ! 10+ (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 755 Points Almedia Knight-Oliver (10/29/2009 3:49:00 PM)

    The dark side of humanity...I do not fear the that side of me. I turn the 'Light' [the source of everything] then watch it flee. A good write Eyan and a 10++ (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 24 Points Emma Adamyan (10/29/2009 12:08:00 PM)

    well done! sharp and quite in 10 (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Samah Elhawy (10/29/2009 12:03:00 PM)

    first thank you so much for your care
    and what a great wrods you have...it shows what we all have inside with the devil
    keep going...you are so good (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Susan Jarvis (10/29/2009 10:28:00 AM)

    Just as it says on the tin - dark and devilish, devilicious even! S :) (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, October 23, 2009

Poem Edited: Monday, November 9, 2009

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