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'Gee, you're looking good today'.
I said as I looked down.
He winked a bit and slightly smiled,
But never made a sound.
'Yes, you're looking good today '.
I said in joyful cheer.
I would have hugged him oh so tight,
Could I have held him near.
He was there, just as he was,
Sure all there was of him.
A silent head, without a form.
A tech, in charge of them.
The wires and plugs that kept alive
The head of my best friend.
So he could live another day,
of life, that may not end.
The table there on which it lay,
A laptop universe.
Sadly holding this display.
How could a fate be worse?
They'd made for him a phony form,
Just as he once had been.
They sure need a place called Hell,
To put these _______s in.
I pressed a tab on his display
And he soon came alive.
What ere it was, it seemed as though,
He had a good hard drive.
I heard his voice as it had been.
Amazing, what they do!
'My friend, I'm glad you came today.
I don't see much of you '.
I tried to smile, it must be him,
I thought there after all.
Science plays such tricks on us
So often in this hall.
He talked to me, I talked to him,
For just a little while.
I wonder at such things as this,
Our lives of endless guile.
I left the lab of tortured souls
And looked out at the stars.
Perhaps they did such things as this
Once long ago, on Mars.
I breathed the air, such as it was;
With all its smoke and grit
And prayed I'd be at peace someday
As just a part of it.
GREENWOLFE 1962
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Colin J...
(7/18/2009 4:53:00 AM) |
As per the number of comments...
A great poem of this technological age...
Superb...
Colin J...
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Cristy Upshaw
(4/15/2009 3:37:00 PM) |
Your words always so brilliant and deeply empowering. Technology is truly nothing without the interaction of people's creative minds and involvement.
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Samanyan Lakshminarayanan
(4/13/2009 2:22:00 AM) |
technology in whatever form is nothing without the man behind it...the technological connectivity we have now is just great...the people haven't become true enough to really connect
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Elaine Oxamendi Vicet
(3/15/2009 8:25:00 AM) |
The drudgery, the dependency on the almighty tech. True we do personalise the inanimate and for some it is their only company. Sadness and truth resonates; rhyme or no..I like it and think it is well penned.
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Anthony Dakhoul
(3/6/2009 3:24:00 AM) |
i totaly love this poem. When i read it i think of the movie bladerunner. What does the social future hold for us, computers as freinds, a world devoid of the natural of whats real about being humans. i also love the connection to Mars. Beautiful poerty, thanks for sugesting this poem to me, its psycological, satirical and quite deep at the same time.
All in all an exelant poem. And sure i will create some simple poems, i tend to overdo mine withe the symoblism and confusion.
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Stephen Stirk
(3/5/2009 8:08:00 AM) |
I really enjoyed your poem 'A Laptop Universe'. I particularly love rhythm and rhyme. The balance of your poem is first class as is the rhyme. A wonderful 21st century piece written in traditional style. Wit and even flow. flow. For me it has the lot. I'm married to my computer.
Mr Steve J Computer.
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Paul Henry Dallaire
(2/19/2009 3:01:00 PM) |
Greenwolf. I hope you realize your way ahead of your time cause who'd think as a computer as a friend or whatever. Well I guess that's where were at to-day a lot people have nothing else. As for myself I live alone and without my video games or my playing on the internet here at the library I'd have nuthin. Great idea put into words. My song King Of The Ottawa City Cowboys I refers to' don't pay that ol cowboy no mind but it's okay he'll do a computer game one more time' I enjoyed reading it. No kidding..
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N Olmedo
(2/17/2009 12:53:00 PM) |
Funny and thought provoking. I saw myself in it. I loved it, thank you, i will read more. :)
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Maria Barbara Korynt
(2/15/2009 3:04:00 PM) |
Very well you took control of rhyming what isn't quite simple. Brilliantly you are also writing and I like it. Greeting :) Maria Barbara Korynt
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