Daddy's coming home tonight, I hope he's feeling better,
But if he isnt and I'm hurt, Mum, I've written you a letter.
'Dear Mum, I am sorry, for everything I've done,
I tried to be so good for Dad, but thats when it all begun.
You see, I never told you this, but every night, while you're out,
Daddy comes to beat me, even though I scream and shout.
I don't want you to feel guilty, I don't want you to feel sad,
Because, Mum, its all my fault, I must have been so bad.
Please try to stay happy Mum, and I do love you,
Please do believe me, because its so true.
But this time Daddy went too far, he gave me such a fright,
He wouldnt stop hurting me, thats why I died tonight.'
I sit in the corner of my dark bedroom,
I try and stay so quiet, buried in the gloom.
Daddy's coming home tonight, I hope he's feeling better,
But if he isnt and I'm hurt, Mum, I've written you a letter.
Given to me by a friend who wanted to share what it felt like to be in an abse family
aww thats good, but its so sad! does your dad really treat you that way: (
It's a really great piece of work....so much emotion to it....well done ~
This poem has a lot of feeling put into it. I thikn its really good. I have a question though. How could she write the letter if she was dead?
Becky, I think the emotions in this are very powerful. Child abuse is a pretty serious topic and it's an important one to shed light onto. You've done a good job here. To be honest, I would remove the first statement where you say it's untrue. Although it may be fictional, when you put that there for the reader to read it first all it seems to do is say ''Don't read this cause I don't mean it' You know what I mean? What you've written is strong and rather than minimize it.....let the reader just feel it. For somebody it is true...even if it's not for you. I hope you understand what I'm saying. I think that like discredits your poem before your readers even have the chance to decide for themselves. Sincerely, Mary
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Wow, I think this poem is so powerful. I wouldn't change a thing. I understand where you're coming from and I think you handled it beautifully