Alone Poem by louis rams

Alone

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Alone

Do you really want to be alone?
No one to talk to except on the phone.
You say you don't need no one to share those empty nights
By being alone you avoid arguments and fights.
Just one load in the washing machine
Just one dish you have to clean.
No extra food that you must buy, except for the
Cat or dog who's by your side.
If your family members are all gone
How the hell will you hold on?
If you can't get to call 9-1-1 then you know you are done.
Get out of your loneliness and misery
A statistic you do not want to be.
Get someone into your life that you know does care
And with that person your life you'll share.
Two hearts are better than none, and the arguments
May not be fun.
But it's better than being alone and at life you don't throw stones.
Find someone who is compatible to you
And what I say you'll find is true.
© L. RAMS 072618

Thursday, July 26, 2018
Topic(s) of this poem: life
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Khairul Ahsan 17 August 2018

Please, either drop 'don't' from the third line, or replace 'no one' by 'any one'. I think, that's what was suggested by poet Bri Edwards in his comment.

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Khairul Ahsan 17 August 2018

'Find someone who is compatible to you And what I say you'll find is true.' - A good advice to end the poem with. Are you yourself a lonely person? That's the question that cropped up in my mind after reading the poem.

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Louis Rams 18 August 2018

thanks for your comment and no I am not a lonely person! I am married 53 years with children and grand children. this poem is from hearsay of other people talking and things that I see.

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Bri Edwards 28 July 2018

check your third line! ;) some favorite lines: Just one load in the washing machine Just one dish you have to clean. ........i lick my plates 'clean'. if i want two hearts, i'll need two mates, as i have no heart of my own. i just CAN'T HELP wondering what YOUR HOME LIFE is like! to MyPoemList. bri :)

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Louis Rams 18 August 2018

the poem does not apply to me but to others that I have spoken with and things that I see.

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Louis Rams 29 July 2018

thank you my poetic brother and i'll make the correction

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