An Old Man Speaks To A Teenager! Poem by Navod Jayasuriya

An Old Man Speaks To A Teenager!

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''In my youth, '' commenced the old man,
''I encountered so many things'',
''And of course, I was highly imbued with feelings of love and joy''.
Dwelling upon each other, the old man continued.

''That's quite obviously the same, '' replied Charlie,
''Like in your old days, I also have rollicking times'',
''Playing with the frolicsome lambs during day-break'',
''And reveling in singing songs at eventide''.

With a simple sign of reaction,
The old man greeted by laughing,
And then he continued speaking.

''By the time I was your age'',
''I was gregarious and had so many companions around'',
''We used to play on the green field ground'',
''There was a dune besides full of heather'',
''And we gathered and played in summery weather''.

With curiosity and great inquisitiveness,
Charlie was on tenterhooks,
When the old man ceased speaking,
Charlie started asking questions.

''Didn't you even try embarking on something new? '',
''Didn't you even play with the lambs in the morning dew? '',
''Were the companions you had a motley crew? '',
''And what's more about the love you had in your youth? ''.

''It was a day lying on April'',
The old man started with a high-pitched voice,
''We all were tenaciously determined and were in sync'',
''Having strong anticipations of climbing the lofty dune''.

''We spent the whole day climbing the hill'',
''Which we expected that we could with strong will'',
''And there were six companions'',
''Three lassies and three lads'',
''Who finally became knackered climbing the dune''.

''Who were the three lasses? '',
At a glance, Charlie asked,
That question put the old man in a serene mood,
Made him fall into a contemplative hush,
Until Charlie asked another,
The old man remained silent.

''Was there the lass you adored the most? '',
The old man was dumbfounded by the question,
And then he continued replying,

''Oh yes, she was there with us'',
''With significant pulchritude'',
''And an exceptional glide'',
''With shiny grey locks thick and long'',

''Finally, you've arrived at the point'',
''What happened next? '',
''Didn't you tell her that you truly loved her? ''.
''After such a long time, where's she now? '',

After the questions, he inquired,
Charlie could discern a sense of lamentation,
In the old man's eyes when observed,
And then his grandfather replied at last.

''I think it's enough for today'',
''I will unravel everything another day'',
''It's already late for bed'',
With some tears in his eyes,
And with some hidden horrors within,
The old man replied.

An Old Man Speaks To A Teenager!
Monday, February 29, 2016
Topic(s) of this poem: love and friendship
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Hazel Durham 02 April 2016

An amazing write with your great command of the written word as you unfold this heartfelt and moving poem, you have a great natural talent as your poem flows with such ease and the stamp of your own beautiful style that makes this write outstanding! So sorry I'm only getting to read your poem now as I have been sick

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Navod Dilhara 29 November 2019

Thank you for appreciating, Haz.

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Rajnish Manga 29 February 2016

Wonderful poetic representation of an interesting interaction between a teenager and an old man. I read it with great pleasure. Like it is with a thrilling short story, the poem leaves the mystery unresolved. Thanks for sharing. Wishing you all the best.

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Navod Dilhara 01 March 2016

Yes. The poem ends with the particular unresolved mystery in order to generate curiosity in the readers' minds.

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Kelly Kurt 29 February 2016

I am always impressed when someone writes in a second language, especially someone so young. There were some punctuation errors and misuses, a few capitalization and spelling errors, but the poem/story was intriguing and kept my attention. I would actually like to see a part 2 of this piece. Well done, Navod

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me poet yeps poet 01 March 2022

A VERY LOVELY METAPHORICAL STORY BUT WHO GOES UP THE HILL LIKE JACK AND JILL NOW ALL KNOW IT YOU TOO POET THANKS FOR YOUR REPLY HAVE YOU EVER READ ME

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Unnikrishnan E S 10 January 2021

The generation gap

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Mahtab Bangalee 05 February 2020

the story of life where every moment faced varieties experience/// extraordinary long narrated poem penned; superb I enjoyed

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Me Poet Yeps Poet 26 January 2020

an excellent piece of story poetry between an old one like me and a smashing youthful one like you In times to come as my memory shadows into oblivion you will then step into my shoes talking with another teenager but more ultramodern The ones today see as an ultimatum the be all and end all of youth

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Bri Edwards 26 November 2019

2 – Re: " ''I will unravel everything the other day'', " try: " I will unravel everything for another day" Navod, i got your long response today to my 3 + years old comment. thanks. Sure, lambs could beused to refer to someone with affection or pity, like girls. to MyPoemList. bri ;)

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