A charred piece of bread doesn't care
if it is given the name of “toast.”
Neither does a bird pause its song
to see itself properly identified
in little Darwinian field books. A flower
will open to the sun, unseen by human eyes.
A man, however, whose particular scent
and soul are not memorable, wilts,
decomposing cell by cell, the
divine fire smothered out.
Man can stick his fingers into water but when he removes his finger the space he created is again replaced by the water. Every space man occupies is replaced with something....but never with him. This is very good.
A philosophical revelation. There is always a tradeoff. The writing was good and the creativity was excellant. I gave it an 8 because I felt that the philosophy needed to be more expansive in definition. Some readers, may not make the connection. GW62
Hello poet friend and a note to say I enjoyed this pondering poetic probing perfect pointed painted post. Loyd
Thank you for inviting me to read your new poem; it is certainly a stirring piece; i agree with your intimated sentiments that Man is created a higher being and that he has the will and responsibility to sustainable life.
I like.. and yet.. as a Man.. I yearn to understand the thoughts and source of your each and every hinging meaning of each word which persistently resonate to be heard. Thank you for sharing with me As I meander through this world on my path of destiny. Merci ~le Griot Electronique xirca 1 09
A well crafted poem, with a good sense of identification, nice message 2 take home.A little more cud have accomplished it though.
A very powerfully deep message presented with pure sentiments...A good piece but i think some prosing will still work.
I found this poem quite interesting. I hope humans will also learn to be simple and free giving like the birds and flowers.
I found this poem quite interesting. I hope humans will also learn to be simple and free giving like the birds and flowers.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
An outstanding poem from a brilliant poet. The metaphors and symbolisms speak to human experience. An excellent poem