In my mind,
I was a shark in the water,
Deep beneath the listless cold,
Testing vibrations
While waiting for prey.
In reality,
I was all too drunk,
Slurring speech, mind,
And thought patterns
With circuit broken movement.
A funny concept
To never quite grasp
how you are unintentionally
perceived:
The other night,
Drunk again:
“Your friends think you’re a piece of shit”
I always thought I had a way with words.
Copyright (c) David DeSantis
There's a lot more to this clever piece than meets the eye, if one chooses to take it. I'm glad I'm going through a sober period. t x
Yes booze does make us do and say all sort of both stupid and painfully true things sometimes David and I do agree, it is amazing we never remember how appauling we were the night before! Great fun, letting your hair down occasionally though huh? Not sure about the title, as being arrogantly drunk doesn't really define the arrogance of some in my minds eye, but it does suit the drunk for sure. Nice to read some poetry dealing with real issues of modern life, smiling at you, soberer than any Judge! lol Tai
i know this situation well. no concept of self. a great one.
a shark...Testing vibrations While waiting for prey... i like this imagery very much even if sober :)
Years ago I had a friend who worked as a copywriter with me...he would always call late at night to tell me he had come up with the perfect format for our clients. I used to go to bed trusting he did, only to find out the next morning that he had been drunk and then forgot to write it down....
Excellen poem, David... it is clear from the many comments you receive... you are very good with words. It seems men are arrogant... women just lose their inhibitions!
Interesting piece this one. On the one hand I actually find arrogance quite appealing (strange as it seems) , on the other, mixed with alcohol it can have quite a different effect. And you've demonstrated this marvellously. HG: -) xx
Oh dear! I think I met you the other night. Spoke very eloquently - it's just that every other word was 'f*****g'. Pity he didn't have your self awareness (when sober) ! Good and self-deprecating as always. Fx
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
For people to understand what makes us the way we become, they have to listen with there eyes...not just their ears. Just a pitty my eyes see double some days :) Great poem... all the best J.L