David DeSantis

Rookie (01/29/85 / Utica, NY)

**hope - Poem by David DeSantis

Do you ever feel
That more is needed
To ease the grind
Of the axe today,
Which tends to halt
All intuition
And put in line
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Do you ever dream
Of a world of passion
Where seamless seams
Find there way
To ocean currents
That defy rhythm
And destroy boundaries
That we have made.

Do you ever want
To shear the linens
that cover the mental
Corpse of decay
To defy gravity
And stand on airwaves
And think of things
That you should not say

Do you ever pursue
The dreams of your childhood
Lost in the garden
That you used to play
When hope was alive
In springs simple water
Cooling your senses
As a child in the rain.


Copyright (c) David DeSantis


Comments about **hope by David DeSantis

  • Rookie - 126 Points Leslie Alexis (heaven Is My Home) (2/16/2009 8:48:00 PM)

    quite astounding piece you have here. (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie - 0 Points Ben Gieske (1/31/2009 3:50:00 PM)

    I also like the format you chose for this poem. It reads with a very lyrical rhythm. The rhyming works at very nicely and your have some inner rhymes wich add to the flavor of the poem and are not overly evident.

    A pleasant picture and memory to end the poem. Well done. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Rebel Heart (11/9/2008 12:15:00 PM)

    I'm keeping this one David... the simplicity and innocence that comes across in the final stanza is resounds. The flow, the phrasing, the images...I love it all. Heading straight[ back to the top to re read. jxx (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 213 Points Palas Kumar Ray (11/2/2008 10:08:00 AM)

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    Nice way saying. The last stanza I liked most. Superb.
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  • Rookie - 12 Points Onelia Avelar (10/9/2008 1:43:00 PM)

    The poem is composed in a wonderful manner, the question form involves one at once in the depth of the self-analyzing labyrinth, marked by fundamental verbs: to feel, to dream, to want, to pursue... The rhythm is perfect. I like the second and the last stanza very much, 'the world of passion where seamless seams...'etc. Hopefully this 'Hope' will get in the Top 500! BR, one (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Anita Atina (10/7/2008 12:02:00 AM)

    To be as a child in the rain, revelling in the now! Wonderful poem David (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Amy (10/6/2008 3:40:00 PM)

    wow, very talented for 23 year old (your previous comment) well done- i really enjoyed it (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Duncan Wyllie (10/6/2008 12:49:00 PM)

    I was thinking along these lines just yesterday, brilliant poem said so well

    Thankyou for sharing your art
    Love duncan X (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 64 Points Vonda Overlie (10/6/2008 12:47:00 PM)

    Always!
    I loved this. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Chitra - (10/6/2008 8:34:00 AM)

    alimnetation for the soul in the form of self reflection.
    good write (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Tia Maria (10/3/2008 2:07:00 PM)

    ALWAYS & forever - the inner child remains & fairies still exist (& magic mushrooms too - lol) .... awesome poem 10 :) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Tj Becker (10/3/2008 10:44:00 AM)

    I more then liked this poem, you penned the feelings of many. Every word rang true.So glad I picked this to read first. Thanks for sharing. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Rakhi Jayashankar (10/3/2008 10:21:00 AM)

    stand on airwaves
    And think of things
    That you should not say

    beautful lines 10+ (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 421 Points Ency Bearis (10/3/2008 10:11:00 AM)

    a wonderful verses..an inspiring piece, , , great write...

    Ency Bearis (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Reshma Ramesh (10/3/2008 9:53:00 AM)

    wow.....David......you ought to be proud of this.....it is great! ! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Tai Chi Italy (10/3/2008 9:46:00 AM)

    Yes I do, too frequently but like the title dictates...Hope is always out there. Drifting upon our minds imagination, is a poets store of inspiration, and we just have to dip our toes. Grinning at you, Tai (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Lynda Robson (10/3/2008 9:44:00 AM)

    We can but live in hope David, another quality poem from you, well done,
    10
    Lynda xx (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, October 3, 2008

Poem Edited: Thursday, October 9, 2008


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