As We Slept Poem by Stug Jordan

As We Slept

Rating: 5.0


I reached out
as we slept,
slowly waking
finding the bed,
behind eyes;
sweet dreams
inside our heads.

Looking in
at odd hours
as winter approaches;
its deaf tread
on ice,
across the frozen
flowerbed.

Bound together,
tight sheets:
arms like stone
as the winds throw
over lawns;
grey with the
dirty snow.

Your hands
reach in morning,
in a new sun
where flowers undo;
lined in soil,
heads bowed on
death row.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Original Unknown Girl 30 April 2007

God this is good, there are some blinding lines in here. It seems effortless and flows so very smoothly. HG: -) xx

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I think you wrote this quickly and I think it's rather beautiful - one of those of-the-tongue pieces. t x

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Original Unknown Girl 27 November 2007

It would be a crime if your words were never published for more to read. This is so beautiful Stug and reminds why I loved reading you from the off.... Wonderful piece! HG: -) xx

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Shelley L Baxter-stanley 29 October 2007

What a way with words Stug! I love this piece...the imagery is so real and easy to see. Great title and just a wonder filled piece of poetry... I especially love the last verse! =Shelley=

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Bernard Alain 08 June 2007

I enjoyed this very much as well Stug, the stylings verys similar to that of Dunstan Attard (Malta) , I think the spirirual overtones and unobtrusive imagery work well here. I will be back to read more of your fine poetry later. Bernie

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Alison Cassidy 05 May 2007

Fascinating piece - a stream of conscious winter reverie penned with love. Wonderful. love, Allie xxxxxxxxxxx

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Anna Russell 03 May 2007

This is gorgeous, you have a wonderful way with words. Hugs Anna xxx

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