But You Didn'T Poem by Joseph Morehead

But You Didn'T

Rating: 3.9


I looked at you and smiled the other day

I though you would see

But you didn't I said I love you and waited for what you'd say

I thought you'd hear me

But you didn't

I asked you to come outside and play ball with me

I thought you'd follow me

But you didn't

I drew a picture just for you to see

I thought you'd save it forever

But you didn't

I made a fort for us in the woods

I though you'd camp out with me

But you didn't

I found some worms and stuff for fishing

I thought you'd wanna go with me

But you didn't

I need you just to talk to-to share my thoughts with

I thought you'd want to

But you didn't

I told you about this game hoping you'd show up to play

I thought you'd surely come

But you didn't

I asked you to share my youth with me

I thought you'd want to

But you couldn't

My country called me off to war

You asked me to come home safely

But I didn't

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Marisha Vastenhout 05 March 2014

This poem is almost exactly the same as 'But you didn't ' by Merrill Glass. It is the poem of a woman (Merrill Glass herself) who's husband had to fight in the Vietnam war and he never returned home. So I won't rate your poem at all. Because I'm afraid you were simply trying to copy the idea of another beautiful poem.

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Marilynn Louis 06 September 2015

i believe it is intentionally written that way because of the perspective. If you noticed in Merrill Glass' poem it's written in the woman's perspective, but in this case it is the contrary where the perspective is that of the man. In my interpretation this was written in the idea of a complementing piece such as a response poem.

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Mohammad Akmal Nazir 10 May 2011

I love the way you wrote the poem. Deep and wise with Great imagery. Excellent write. I rate it 10. Thanks for sharing..... Please read and rate my poem 'A humble complaint' on page 2. Please use the search box by typing the name of the poem if the page doesn't open with the title of the poem.

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