Cat And Mouse. Poem by Annette Aitken

I love fun poems, you did a nice job with the cat on the hunt but the little mouse knew all the tricks...I love it.

'The little mouse knew all the tricks first hide and seek, and then to peek. A quick step right, then dashing left he disappears, the cat's bereft.' this stanza was especially a lot of fun and the final stanza with an extra word in brackets was clever, really enjoyed this read :)

:) ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! bri THERE! THAT is 20 characters for PH.

i've heard of hunker as a verb. and i've heard of haunches. but i never (?) heard of hunkers as a synonym of haunches. NOW i have. and yesterday i learned, in a PAPER dictionary, that bi-weekly can mean twice a week OR one every two weeks! it is similar with bi-monthly. Ears in tuned to every sound.......'are tuned' or 'are turned' or ears, tuned/turned to every sound, .. What say you? :) “The little mouse climbs up to see if danger maybe nearing he.” ……… I really like how you used ‘poetic license’ to make a rhyme! “A quick step right, then dashing left he dissappears, the cat's bereft.” ……….. I love these lines and the rhymes. “bereft” is perfect. But I just noticed (not before now) that disappears is misspelled. Easy to do. :) My favorite lines of this poem: “The little mouse lets out a squeek (shouts) come back another day, next week.” ……………….priceless! including funny! Bri :) Could be one for a showcase, but I’d like you to clean it up if you didn’t mind, as per my suggestions I just sent to you. But it is YOUR poem. :) To MyPoemLiist it goes!

still a treat to read. bri :)

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I couldn't decide whether to cheer for the cat or the mouse in this one, but I loved the ending! Another great poem!

A quick step right! ! Thanks for sharing this poem with us.

Nice poem and lovely to read. Reminds me of all the cats I've been fortunate to know over the years, they all seem to very different characters even when their brother and sister.