its getting darker and darker
the light is slowly fading away
i cant see anymore can anyone
show me the way out of this
horrible place no one wants
to help me out i start to
scream and scream no one
answers i scream louder and
louder no one dares to come to
my screams i start to cry myself
to sleep hopin that this only a dream
i wake up to find out that this is not
a dream and to find that it is real
and im stuck here forever in this dark place
Ive felt this way, many times before...i hope things turn out better
I like the way you allow the narrative to run on without punctuation. It helps reinforce the feeling of being out of control in your place of darkness. Compelling piece. love, Allie xxxx
Ouch, disturbing to read. Puts the reader in your angst-filled place. Well done.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Helplessness and frustration like the words tumbling from your mind. Nicely done - watch punctuation and spelling, otherwise a nice effort. Hopefully not a personal piece, but full of emotion. Linda