I'm in the place, just before dreams end
and daily life begins. The place where
evergreen trees are in abundance and the
birds sing.
The place where hunger is no more. The place
where freedom is at the core.
The place where the invention of peace was
never needed. The place where the end of
life never succeeded.
The place where interracial relationships
are the norm. The place where new types of
life are borne.
The place where god is still deemed an
option. The place where the soul is still
beyond our comprehension.
The place where you and I meet. The place where
four becomes eight feet.
Hello Jeremy. I do like your though filled poem, nice work. Loyd
When the dawn awaken the morning...there's still seed of love to grow..
A very nice poem but beware of fashionable politically correct statements infiltrating your poems as this negates the dream-like, non-intellectualizing state of mind you are trying to portray here.
I'm biased I love good rhymes and this one has that with a lovely message. Great flow :)
There is a time when we can relax and feel the soothing breeze of optimism. You catch this very well. Tom Billsborough
So optimistic! ! ! It's a joy reading the beautiful lines...
This was interesting, I especially like the closing stanza. -John
The place where hunger is no more. The place where freedom is at the core. The place where the invention of peace was never needed. The place where interracial relationships are the norm. very nice dear Jeremy.. may your hopes be fulfilled. this is naturally my prayer too everyday before the holy altar. i like to read the poets who are in unison with the Almighty God.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
A hopeful DAWN...I liked the last line The place where four becomes eight feet. It's meaningful.