Bri Edwards

Gold Star - 9,642 Points (some time ago / Earth, i believe)

Death In A Rhododendron …… [nature; Predator/Prey In-Miniature; Invertebrates; Medium] - Poem by Bri Edwards

As I came out from behind a backyard bush,
where I'd gone to secretly pee,
I paused to admire its clumps of purple blossoms,
and there I spied a silent …..bumblebee.

I stared at the bee (I was very close) ,
and then I stared some more.
The flower's inner surface was near-white,
and the bee was near the flower's core.

I waited for the striped bee to fly off,
but that darn bee never did budge.
THEN I saw the yellow spider sucking at the bee's neck,
like I would feast on a piece of fudge.

I think the spider had injected the bee,
turning the bee's innards into soup.
Part of bee would be converted to spider tissue,
and part of bee would become spider poop.

I'm writing this sitting outdoors in a chair,
and I just noticed a small spider on my sleeve.
It's a teeny-weeny (little) spider, BUT,
if I see a GIGANTIC spider coming, I think I'll leave!

(May 30,2014)


Poet's Notes about The Poem

IT IS ALL TRUE. i really did not notice the color-camouflaged spider for quite a while. its head was facing the head of the bee and the spider seemed to have its mouth against the bee's neck. it was not a honeybee; i think 'bumblebee' is pretty accurate. i finally decided i had looked long enough and left the spider to dine in peace.

Comments about Death In A Rhododendron …… [nature; Predator/Prey In-Miniature; Invertebrates; Medium] by Bri Edwards

  • Silver Star - 3,114 Points S.zaynub Kamoonpuri (6/15/2014 1:14:00 AM)

    He he im alive n kickin, centpeds rarely cause death.
    Aha n i admire yor observant eye at the food chain eh. But dont yah pee in d garden when u hav a fine washroom ok.; -) . Yor flow n rhyme are enviable here. Enjoyd many lines here esp the innard soup one. I love only such creative fun poems. I tel u other english poets write boring so i dont say it is fabulous unles it realy is. Hey do u hav blac widows there? Im terified of them frm the telly n pics. (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie - 42 Points Adheez Van Der Beanthz (6/14/2014 3:28:00 PM)

    good one
    thanks for sharing
    and keep writing (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 9,642 Points Bri Edwards (6/10/2014 2:23:00 PM)

    oops! i just proofread my poet's note and found that i typed it's for its. i've edited it so it should be corrected soon! bri :) (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, June 10, 2014

Poem Edited: Tuesday, June 10, 2014


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