Simone Inez Harriman

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Devoured - Poem by Simone Inez Harriman

Diminished
Skeletal and naked
I am now only candlelit bones
Mere scrap of a voluptuous feast
I had served with my best china

You my guest dined and fled
With all the silver
Consumed
In your haste to alienate
An emotional plate
I am swiftly scraped
Clean

Even now
Down the bulimic drain
Your hurt hurts me
My body waste disposes
Sewage from a compost
Of rancid depression and rage
As your chewing enzymes bite
Caustic from your heart

Topic(s) of this poem: depression, hurt


Comments about Devoured by Simone Inez Harriman

  • Edward Kofi Louis Edward Kofi Louis (2/21/2016 2:45:00 AM)

    Naked! With the pains of life. Thanks for sharing. (Report) Reply

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  • Paul Brookes Paul Brookes (11/12/2015 11:20:00 AM)

    This is so painful and sad I caught all the essence of this poem such a poigant write thanks (Report) Reply

  • Pamela Sinicrope Pamela Sinicrope (11/4/2015 10:33:00 AM)

    This is a painful read because it captures the raw emotion resulting from the breakup of an unhealthy relationship. The combination of bulimia with the metaphor of your abused body to consumed food is perfect here, but oh so disturbing....downright cataclysmic. You've woven in so perfectly the emotions and insecurities that women have in the course of a relationship that is most probably abusive but oh so attractive at a younger age: body image (too fat) , high highs and low lows, giving everything and receiving nothing in return. The star of the poem is in the telling and the imagery you use. It just works…’chewing enzymes, ’ ‘rancid depression and rage.’ The title, “Devoured, ” is aptly dramatic and the opening of ‘diminished, ” just sets the stage for the dramatic tragedy. Well done. This was a bravo for me! So many women can relate to this so well written and crafted poem. (Report) Reply

  • Daniel Brick Daniel Brick (7/6/2015 10:42:00 AM)

    The energy in this poem fairly bursts out of the confines of printed language. Your poem tells a story about the speaker's dashed hopes for a dinner for two, but the events blur together as the emotional reaction of the speaker take control of the poem. This is what I call FUSED language and in this case it's also explosive. From the vivid title image of DEVOURED to the closing sentiments of DEPRESSION AND RAGE your poem is cathartic. (I just saw the date of the other comments - 2009! This time bomb of a poem has been smoldering for 9 years and it still explodes!) (Report) Reply

  • Marieta Maglas (10/15/2009 5:04:00 PM)

    wonderful metaphorical poem, nice self-portrait, very well expressed...........10 (Report) Reply

  • Chris G. Vaillancourt Chris G. Vaillancourt (10/15/2009 2:41:00 PM)

    A fantastic piece with wonderful images (Report) Reply

  • _____________________________________ - (1/8/2009 11:08:00 PM)

    Your hurt hurts me
    ne plus ultra.... Simone
    aroha (Report) Reply

  • Kesav Easwaran (7/20/2008 5:54:00 AM)

    'candle lit bones'...one phrase... the whole poem lit up...good write...10 grade (Report) Reply

  • Tiffanie Lau (12/30/2007 8:04:00 PM)

    this poem is so visual and tasteful. awesome stuff! Thanks for the poem. (Report) Reply

  • Ben Gieske (12/7/2007 7:39:00 PM)

    Wonderful, gives a new vocabulary to the passions. (Report) Reply

  • john tiong chunghoo john tiong chunghoo (2/22/2006 11:32:00 PM)

    dear inez, this is lovely too. (Report) Reply

  • Lamont Palmer (1/30/2006 10:41:00 AM)

    Simone, this is quite powerful; it has a Plathian tone to it, if you don't mind that comparison. Nice job. And I hope you've been doing wonderfully. (Report) Reply

  • Tony Jennett (1/25/2006 1:13:00 PM)

    Bitter but brilliant. So glad your muse is reawakened (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, January 25, 2006

Poem Edited: Wednesday, May 4, 2016


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