....Fatherless Poem by Not Long Left

....Fatherless

Rating: 5.0


Me old man only ever eld me once
before he closed the door forever.
I always had hope in my other father
Santa, thinking he would love me more.
But he like the old man was opless
Once a year he would try to buy me
with presents, and even then never
bothered to show his face.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Derek Haughton 21 December 2011

Some consistency needed, also an indication of the missing H, 'eld, 'opeless for instance, if opeless, why Hope. and He? Content very evocative!

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Sulaiman Mohd Yusof 03 April 2008

nevertheless.........the endless longing.............

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Nalini Hebbar 01 October 2006

vincent...the missing 'H' intrigues...so you ate your father! ! ! ...lol...love...nalini

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Kelly Allen Vinal 01 October 2006

Sad but powerful piece, Vincent! Great therapy!

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