Feathers Poem by Ravi Panamanna
Feathers
The bird is gone
The tree is now asleep.
The waves are calm,
The tide is now over.
The room is empty
The traveller has gone.
It is all a whispering light,
The shadow hasn't left.
The flower hath fallen,
It was only dawn.
The sun was young
But it was soon twilight.
He too had a world,
He too had a lingering dream.
Before the bud was open
It was to meet the winds.
He inched towards death,
His world was no more lit.
Prayers served a passing wind,
Life was soon into broken strings.
The game was finally lost,
The heart sank into silence.
The bird hath finally flown
And a few feathers in the cage remain.
Rains are over now,
The valley hath fallen ito silence.
And in the whispering air
A song of dreams allures.
everything has an end. but too soo is cruel.nicely written and poigant. voted10 surya
the bird hath finally flown...a few feathers remain....deep lines.....cancer and its treatment hazards gives me a deep pain...a few months back my dad died of cancer...or rather not able to withstand the treatment he died....in just a month i could see a 10 to 15 yrs older man in him...it wears you down.....a torture of a disease
I know where you got the Idea from? You got the Idea from Elton john song Pigeon Skyline. The worlds are Let me loose from your hands Let me fly away into the sky. I can remember all the worlds. I gave youthe two lines of the song that I remembered
the poem is good, and as aldo kraas has said, its not the same as elton john's pigeon skyline song, but it has got the similar kind of feel..
fine poem. the ending is good.. i like it.. very much.
we all expect to die but if one so young faces death, it is all the more painful especially to the parents.... there is a peacefullness in the poem, a resignation even, and faith remains strong till the end....
Hi Ravi - A very poignant poem on a very moving subject. 'Dead doth hide but not divide it is as though the rose that grew upon our garden wall has blssomed on the other side'. You use of metaphores is excellent. V1 'The bird has flown' V2 'The room is empty' V3 'The flower has fallen'. In V4 we sense his aspirations 'He too had a world' however in V5 'He inched towards death'. In V6 you face reality 'The game was finally LOST'. V 7 is the denoument: 'Rains are over now - The valley hath fallen into silence - And in the whispering air - A song of dreams allures'. A fine poem with excellent structure and rhythm and a very poetic use of words. MAX - Yours in poetry - JOHN.
very nice and touchy poem. thanks for sharing. this poem really stirs emotion.
Ravi, you have an innate talent to write stories in verses! Excellent narrative poem, lovely rhymes, touching........ 10++++++++++
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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everything has an end. life after death is unending...this is sad but we cant do otherwise to stop the call of death...