Final Door....... Poem by karen sinclair

Final Door.......

Rating: 5.0


Brown house
Grey smiles
Green green grass
Black shoes
Crystal tears with heart felt whispers
Hugs

Blue sky with cream teeth
Green green grass
(hold that thought)
Glassed water grasped
Taut innards
Flowers brought

White horses
Braided manes
White lilies
Window pane
White carriage
To carry forth
Green green grass
Hold that thought

Passing traffic
Collars grasped
Blurry images
Tend then pass
Crystal tears
Smart black tie
Shake and smile
Avoid the eye

Deep breath enter in
Listen watch
Let them begin
Then stare at the floor

'Bye bye darling'
Open door

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Valsa George 29 September 2012

Scattered images knit together in a thread which can be interpreted in more than one way! An allusive poem, I suppose!

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Knight Fizzstorm 27 August 2012

Horse and carriage poems are the best kind. Funeral/weddings, endings/beginnings. Commendable poem.

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Hamid Negah 25 August 2012

Reading your poetry gives vitality.

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Valerie Dohren 24 August 2012

Beautiful but very sad write, yet quite lovely and well expressed.

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Danny Draper 23 August 2012

If it wasn't for the white carriage this could easily be the images and symbols for a funeral and not a wedding. The repetition and humor were very characteristic of a wedding - tension and humor. The use of colour and monochrome tones in fabrics and flowers and language was succinct almost cautious like a shy bride not used to being the center of attention. Great ending a farewell and a new door opens with expectation. well done, good poem.

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