Fragmented Poem by Nosheen Irfan

Fragmented

Rating: 5.0


And they say
There's always a way
I must be blind
Not to find
A reason to be alive
A chance to thrive
No way out- -
A voice shouts
Within me is a clutter
To put me in a flutter
Is this madness
Or plain sadness
That eats away at my soul
That won't let me be whole


Nosheen Irfan © 2017

Thursday, March 16, 2017
Topic(s) of this poem: depression,despair
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
Sometimes you are so upset you write in this silly way. lol
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Valsa George 17 March 2017

When hope comes, it is put out by doubts. This switching off and on of the mind is something we cannot help. But try to believe that there is always a chance to thrive!

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Susan Williams 17 March 2017

The style matched the title and the heart ache of the piece. I don't find it silly at all- -you are broadening the way your poems can carry their message and that is exactly what poets do. I call it 10!

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Muhammad Ali 18 March 2017

upset and silly.. no. but upset and real poetic. beautiful poem. and in better days it will remind you a dark moment that will no longer exist

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Barry Middleton 19 March 2017

Well said. To resolve this problem I became a hermit - happiest years of my life. I think you have to be old to really get into it though.

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Mj Lemon 20 March 2017

Fragmented....broken. Some fractures cannot be seen, and they may be the most serious or profound kind of injuries. I think this is a profound work, Nosheen.

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Konab Ghumman 13 March 2019

Is this madness Or plain sadness That eats away at my soul A truly fantastic poem leaving a reader mesmerized by the beauty of the words embedded in this piece. Glad to read

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Edward Kofi Louis 05 June 2017

That eats away at my soul! ! Thanks for sharing this poem with us.

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Norah Tunney 13 April 2017

You describe this dialogue that goes on in the mind so succiently .I love the clutter flutter connection.Wonderful poem you capture the craziness we all experience so well. thanks Nosheen. I was drawn to the title as I wrote a poem with the same title. Full marks

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Madathil Rajendran Nair 03 April 2017

That ache is a gift poets are blessed with. It certainly gnaws at one's soul; yet, that gnaw is a yearning to be whole. Well done! (10)

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Daniel Brick 31 March 2017

I just read and commented in your poem about the Dream that brings Coherence. That poem from March 29 answers the crisis of the soul expressed in this one from March 16. It took your poetic mind (which is also known as - your SOUL) only half a month to resolve your crisis of confidence. Isn't that splendid? !

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Nosheen Irfan

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Lahore, Pakistan
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