Blossomed human acumen
Brokered what? A broken Earth!
Caveman became a craving man
To Creator’s regret
Tied tight rights around mien
Carved out lines between man and man
Made canons and framed bastions
Yet felt not safe; built deadly weapons! !
Running away galaxies lampoon
“Free cruisers we are in the endless Empyrean!
No fetters to stop free fly in our infinite vistas
And no bounds to our celestial caravan!
No need to take passports and visas
And no rules of emigration”
“With love-Ambrosia God made us all
We sip it all along; sparkle and sprawl
Basking ever, in its eternal elation!
But spilled it all over, you humans
And your fatal intelligentsia; with insolence
And alas licking with pride, satanic toxins! ! ”
Sathya sir...this is so powerful poem....provoking thoughts...stunning use of words...10
very striking sir...hitting to the core... indeed a very vivid evidence of your great thoughts, of your brilliancy words are so poetic yet so powerful... the lines are serving us with truth...and expressed the concern in your heart on what is happening now...that we, humans are responsible...that even the galaxies redicule (us?) ...... Broken earth? no more visa? this is very important words to think of... really an awakening piece i remember what i read months ago on current issues that the earth 'screams' that her chirps and whistles could be heard by aliens...Scientist said it is is related to the same phenomena that results in the Northern Lights...the AKR Whatever may be her (Mother Earth) reasons...we should be aware of that....She might be in pain...and after that what's next...The Galaxy? ....Your write is very provoking sir....possibilities are..... 10++++++...and i would like to bookmark this...
if have a kind of people in the universe that can make rational use of the natural resources and live in peace all over their planet, yes we deserve such lampoon. if haven't, we may with justice make joke on each one of us, we deserve it as well. you're brilliant.10 for this piece.
love-ambrosia..replaced by fatal intellegensia..the growth from the caveman to now has'nt been a true growth due to fear daggers and fear shields we hold..divided we stand..and even the unity we find is again governed by the fatal intelligence...a fantastic write sir...i tried the same subject in my poem 'hold'
You have dealt with this subject of man's greed and egoism with a great deal of finesse - a timely poem with deep connotations...10++
Sathya, An agonising poem with a timely alarm bell to the greedy, megalomaniac and paranoid man hurtling towards doom for his anti-Nature crimes and exploitations...a powerful poem with an eco message. Warm regards.
Yes, time has come for God to regret His creation! 10! In my latest poeM - 'SCARECROWS', I have have tried to express similar thoughts! Hope you will like it? - Raj Nandy
Indeed a powerful write! amazing words creating a thought provoking poem.10
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
an interesting take... I so enjoyed this line 'Caveman became a craving man To Creator’s regret' haha.. you just nailed a hammer home by taking delinquency and crafting it over eloquency.... aroha xx