sometimes confusion laces
the mind and sometimes
visible green dots
float across the puddles
like directionless paper boats
sometimes diffidence
sits on its haunches
weighing a ton on the
fringes of the heart
sometimes fear sets ripples
like the grandfather's clock
after striking into the wee hours
sometimes stars flicker
beyond my reach
sometimes full of confidence
i float in the weightless
spaces within...
a fountain of emotions
spring forth in your inevitable
and eternal absences
04sep2009
14.53hrs
The nayaki-nayaka bhava of the earlier literature is present here...in the last two lines the most specially...nayaki's emotions in the absence of nayaka....but I don't understand why you have used the term eternal...or am I wrong totally...your style is impressive as usual....thank you
Hey Indira! What happend to u? Possessed by Goddess Saraswathi or some other like Keats and Milton............I am smothered by your poetics........what a feeling....................just I can't say orally! ! ! ! ! ! I wish I give a silent hug to you......Thank u soooo much for these wonderful feelings.........even more wonderfully expressed.
Excellent.. Nice lines depict the nature and the character..
a lovely musing there...fear is a very delicate thing..it is so solid and abstract..satan's creation..it smiles it.s way into us
a very well crafted piece Indira....you have put together so many thoughts and observations giving your reader food for thought as well...10 of course
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
yes...wonderfully composed. it has that anonymous touch...like the poem isn't aware of its own beauty, and it is reciting itself, charming others with its wisdom as well as its innocence. amazing. thank you.