indira babbellapati

Rookie - 71 Points (visakhapatnam, india)

' A Small Attempt To Capture... ' - Poem by indira babbellapati

there's the sea
there's the sky
the moon and the wind too
a picture perfect setting
for you and i
but
you aren't you
i'm not i

inheritors of the promordial fire
we're just the carriers of the
principle that governs nature
to probe and penetrate
the mysterious and mystic
depths and spaces
teasing man for eons
to undo all the knots
to unravel our existence
at each penetration
at each probing
to reach that fleeting moment
of non-existence
severed from the body connect
detached from the earth-bounds

the elements will never cease
the fire will keep burning
but
you'll not be you
and i'll not be i

07jun2010
12.40hrs


Comments about ' A Small Attempt To Capture... ' by indira babbellapati

  • Rookie Prateep Sengupta (7/15/2010 5:56:00 AM)

    The second and the last stanzas are marvellous. The inevitable trends of live have been effectively implied. (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie - 26 Points Gita Ashok (7/6/2010 3:09:00 AM)

    the elements will never cease
    the fire will keep burning
    but
    you'll not be you
    and i'll not be i

    Wonderful and thought-provoking lines! (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 935 Points Rachel Ann Butler (6/23/2010 4:53:00 PM)

    'to reach that fleeting moment
    of non-existence'

    Rachel Ann Butler (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 5,828 Points Rm. Shanmugam Chettiar (6/22/2010 11:07:00 PM)

    extremly well and well appealing. marks 10 (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 145 Points Nimal Dunuhinga (6/19/2010 2:22:00 PM)

    Perfect.! ...........under one roof two chracters live as one but there are two souls? (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Sandra Fowler (6/17/2010 9:16:00 AM)

    While it is true that there is nothing
    new under the sun, this is a very compelling
    piece of work. Excellent, Indira.

    Love,

    Sandra (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 145 Points Leslie Alexis (heaven Is My Home) (6/14/2010 12:27:00 PM)

    :) . and one thing is diffinite about me, God breathe life into me. :) . the rest, the flesh is belongs to the universe. but that soul of mine, is the lords.. :) .

    the poem has some truth. :) . the carbon is you may have been shared by einstein or newton, or King Solomon. :) (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, June 13, 2010

Poem Edited: Sunday, June 13, 2010


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