Commitment.
For life.
To commit- to do with no withdrawal.
This is it, you have chosen it.
Commit a murder- one cannot be revived.
Commit to a marriage- eternal bond of love.
Committed to the act of ending it all,
Marry the ground in a public proclamation
Of your love- or self hatred- after falling
Among the stars which hid in the depths of
The endlessly black winter nights.
Take one last breath,
Towering, quivering, above the stone cold
Ground. That will be you too soon-
Frozen in time; hard and grey.
The earth has cracked you, but beyond repair?
So kiss the earth goodbye.
Plant your lips on its cheek when you
Leave, one scarlet stain that shall be
Wiped away by tears or rain.
Evidence gone but your touch will linger.
Commit. To commit.
Can you?
Can you end it?
For good?
Take one last breath,
And think again.
Suicide is a coward way out. A well articulated piece of poetry, nicely penned in poetic diction with conviction. A good poem indeed. Thanks for sharing Laurie. Please read my poem MANDELA - THE IMMORTAL ICON.
Aside from the typos listed below, this was a well thought out poem, Laurie
Good poem, not that I agreed entirely. May I point out that I surmise that in the third to last verse, you may have meant ‘cheek' instead of 'check', and perhaps in the last line of the third verse you may have meant to say 'beyond past repair'. Or not, just an observation. Adeline
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
suicide, when it is an extreme and 'high' act of free will, has to be respected. Unfortunately, a good deal of people try it just to escape the burden of the world.. then, there are also those who use suicide as a weapon to kill other human beings, even believing to reach - through such an act of pure violence - a faboulous ''paradise'' filled of virgins.. but that it another 'story'..