My eyes light up
inside the thought of you
Your smile like fireflies
I've caught a one
or two
While the summer strokes
my shoulders
And the breeze blows back
my mane
Dare I dream, dare I dream
you'll come again
From the moment I started reading the first LIGHT poem I knew I was hearing a song! So I wasn't surprised to find that confirmed in your POET'S NOTES. The simplicity of the language, repetition of key lines, (dare I dream) , and focus on just one intense emotion are all elements which make up song lyrics. We don't want reflections slowing things down! We want a primal experience and your poem delivers that intensity. I'd like to hear this set to the music you would create out of it.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
I read it once as a poem, and again as a song after reading your notes. I enjoyed both greatly. The words flow well.