Sonya Florentino

Rookie (Manila, Philippines (residing NYC))

Like Onion


Like onion skin

My skin

Layer upon layer

But thin

You can peel me

But ever so slowly

You will cry

I am sorry

But if it's any consolation

I am crying too

For you are finally seeing me

while I'm


undressing



you


© 2009 Sonya Florentino

Submitted: Friday, February 27, 2009
Edited: Tuesday, October 13, 2009

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Comments about this poem (Like Onion by Sonya Florentino )

  • Rookie - 58 Points Brian Jani (7/3/2014 9:10:00 AM)

    wow, short and subtle yet i realy enjoyed the whole idea behind it (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 334 Points Patti Masterman (9/25/2009 11:47:00 PM)

    This is so clever- really! One of the most clever endearing poems ever. So I am not surprised that it was written by you; sometimes all the talent boils itself into a single thing, like it is being distilled..so this is like a fine onion wine..(smile) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 92 Points C. P. Sharma (9/9/2009 9:49:00 PM)

    Sonya, a great unravelling of the self with infinite llayers. Loved it.
    CP (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 50 Points William Lindenmuth (8/25/2009 8:29:00 AM)

    like a search for self, you peel each layer discovering all that you are until you reach the core of your existence. you tend you garden well with words and you continue to grow as a writer (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Lillian Thomas (8/21/2009 9:39:00 PM)

    A very nice poem, Sonya! The metaphor of an onion you turn almost inside out in the last few lines:

    'For you are finally seeing me

    while I'm


    undressing

    you'

    very clever! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Frank Lambert (8/18/2009 1:26:00 PM)

    Nice verse, subtle and clever it's also full of layered humour. Frank (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Rakesh Bedi (8/1/2009 10:25:00 PM)

    ......... Wow.......! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Susan Jarvis (6/27/2009 4:39:00 PM)

    Beautifully crafted layers of sentiment ending with a wry wink. This poem puts me in mind of Valentine by Carol Ann Duffy - onions rule! ! S ;) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Duh Huh (6/19/2009 11:38:00 PM)

    You go girl! ! ! love this poems layers :) It has everything, subtle humor, sensitivity and a pinch of sensuality. Love it. Thank you for sharing. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Jasmin Whyte (5/22/2009 12:56:00 PM)

    This is a sensitive write, but i detect humour under the layers (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Melanie Walendowsky Baker (5/7/2009 10:43:00 PM)

    Thanks for recommending this to me. But once again, you've shown yourself to be more courageous than me. Don't know if I'm capable of allowing anyone to peel away my layers. Lovely, though, really thought-out and honest, as always with your works. I loved it! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 277 Points Ruth Walters (5/3/2009 12:45:00 PM)

    I think this is a very clever little poem: -) Another onion; -))) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 7 Points Laurie Hill (4/19/2009 3:45:00 PM)

    Seeing through to find the you, lovely write............10 (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Viola Grey (3/13/2009 12:31:00 AM)

    I love the way this just drips off the tongue....great piece. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Sandra Fowler (2/28/2009 4:59:00 PM)

    Very provocative, An original mind is definately at work here.
    Excellent use of simile and imagery.

    Warm regards,

    Sandra (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Whitney Nicole Albright* (2/27/2009 11:11:00 PM)

    This is very creative and thoughtful. (Report) Reply

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