saadat tahir

Rookie - 929 Points (21011965 / Islamabad-Pakistan)

Lone Soldier … 2104 - 2k13


Frothing waters dance and spin.
Flip in abundance rainbow fins.
Reach out bridges, span the blues,
colors of water, lakes and hues.
Heady saunter on windy tracks.
Crumpled shirts and slept in slacks.
Trills and tweets of mountain thrush,
waft across valleys to pause the hush.
Brooks gush and gurgle by hewn stairs.
Drive by smiling, beaming, happy pairs.
Clinging fronds along lingering snows.
Nervous barks of pregnant does.

Occasional rat a tat of random fire.
Stark reminder to a stacked up pyre.
For ages clutched by tangle of roots.
Dislodged now with thump of boots.
Boulders hurtle; mill shale to sands.
Avalanches march to tune of bands.
Distant whine intrudes rustle of pines
Lone a soldier under an outcrop dines
Ages passed in these tranquil dales.
Now often rent with echoing wails.
Streams and bluffs clutched by hands,
hid in bunkers under conifer stands.


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21st April,2k13
Islamabad.

Submitted: Sunday, April 21, 2013
Edited: Friday, September 27, 2013

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Exegesis:
Ruminations from a recent trip to Neelum valley on the Pakistan side of Kashmir. The mix of heavenly pristine snow bound beauty and mil-fatigues is unnerving and painful.

Rainbow fins = Rainbow trout.
Bridges = Suspension bridges so common in Neelum valley.

Clutched by hands = Armies of Pakistan and India eye balling each other meters away.

Thump of boots = Peppered mil posts across snow bound cliffs.
Distant whine = Revving 4x4 vehicles laboring steep slopes.

Comments about this poem (Lone Soldier … 2104 - 2k13 by saadat tahir )

  • Bronze Star - 7,260 Points Neela Nath (5/9/2013 10:39:00 PM)

    Loved the words dancing and singing to keep pace with the jubilant nature.Terrific! (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 1,688 Points S.zaynub Kamoonpuri (5/7/2013 7:31:00 AM)

    Wow n wah i wud like to visit neelam valley then to see for myself that which inspired in you such a masterpiece in imagery! I admire d poetic mention of d rainbow fins n then to d bunker n soldier. Impressive poet! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 415 Points Yasmeen Khan (4/24/2013 4:48:00 AM)

    This poem is written in the fashion of classical Nature poetry like Emily Dickinson's and Robert Frost's. It depicts the beauty and charm of Neelam valley and it's 'tranquil dales' very vividly. The poet takes the reader with him on his recent trip there and we can visualize marches to tunes of bands and a 'lone soldier' dining 'under an outcrop.
    'Seeing only what is fair,
    Sipping only what is sweet, ' (Ralph Waldo Emerson) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 603 Points Shahzia Batool (4/22/2013 12:46:00 AM)

    A rich store of vocabulary, with meaningful rhymes and rhythm, and lots of visuals! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 27,070 Points Gajanan Mishra (4/21/2013 4:14:00 AM)

    Lone soldier, good poem, thanks. (Report) Reply

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