It kills inside like a harmful virus
It hurts mind and keeps in stress
In life, it plays a great role like a smart actress
Can`t be removed easy, out of any press
Loneliness, which comes through the departure
Even though you know that will be ok for the future
But it never feels good, in fact changes structure
It break hearts easy like a furniture
Loneliness, which comes through the fight
that`s the worst, everyone is wrong nobody is right
murmuring is the case which brings it all
which hurts to death especially to the soul
Loneliness, the worst emotion
It bits selves out of any action
It feels for everyone with out wondering the station
Nothing kills it but it waste a lot of protection
All of a sudden i wonder
If loneliness lost for ever
That would be better
For sure nobody was to be suffer
The poem was fine except the end...u know when ur poems was in negative aspect from the starting then it must end on a negative way; coz i'm a pessimistic, agnostic and negative thinker i did not like the end...i like the upper portion but the climax cud be made more interesting... :) think over it....! :)
It kills inside like a harmful virus It hurts mind and keeps in stress In life, it plays a great role like a smart actress Can`t be removed easy, out of any press.......masterly ppiece of art from poetess with vivd descriptionof loneliiness with purpose....i liked its idea....10 read mine yes yes yes...yes to to... you go alone...no to sorrow
'Loneliness, the worst emotion It bits selves out of any action It feels for everyone with out wondering the station Nothing kills it but it waste a lot of protection' Well said. A great piece of your work. Beautiful Enjoyed reading it. 10+
Dear Luwi, nice poem which tells the truth. Origin of depression, frustration etc. is loneliness. But since I am quite a loner, I enjoy loneliness sometimes.You discover yourself in a lone atmosphere, you have boundless freedom which may contribute to your creativity and the loneliness has to be taken in your stride. Anyway, my intention is not to debate on the theme of the poem but only to view loneliness in a different perspective.The poetry deserves full marks and compliments.
first thing first, a great piece of poem. u really know how to pain the word lonelyness by using words. that so creative of you. well done great poem =)
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
hi how ar u luwi u know what when i read this poem i feel some thing inside of me any way its so cool and so keep it up