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Louise Lou Weez - Poem by BEAU GOLDEN

Once i had a daisy
I held it in a vase
It allowed me to get lazy
I worried about my face
Then i chewed on the daisy
And i broke it's stupid vase
And the whole damn thing exploded
Back right in my face
You See-A rhyme with face and vase
Do no justice to Louise
Just like i have always done
by telling her she's my squeeze
My next move must be forward
My next move must be pure
I must create great works
My work must reassure
I feel myself arising almost to a peak
My self esteem returned so how can life be bleak?

I gave a call and said i cared
That was all i've ever dared
We both know and others ought
A marriage of minds we platonically wrought
Someone to tease, Someone to ease
She has such grief, i provide comic relief
Someone whose words i can finally believe
Someone at whose side my heart is not ill at ease
That someone i have named Louise

Beau Golden

Comments about Louise Lou Weez by BEAU GOLDEN

  • Rookie ***** ********* (6/29/2006 3:13:00 AM)

    Very good poem Beau, I think you could break the 1st Stanze easily at line, back in my face though. The second stanza, many poets can relate to. It is so hard having to be nice init? lol Not bouncing our readership into hell on our earth, so to speak. I have noticed this need far too frequently in the past year or so. Sometimes a poet just has to kick ass now and again. Like the last poem you read of mine, it just had to come out! lol The thirds stanze is sweet, we all need someone to provide comic relief from grief. Lucky Louise!

    Smiling at you,

    Tai (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, May 30, 2006

Poem Edited: Monday, October 27, 2008

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