I remember feeling broken.
His glare which will always stay.
When I asked him if he loved me,
his reply was, 'Not today.'
This is very powerful. Succinct, but yet retains the essence of what you're trying to say. Beautiful poem Gloria!
I know that movie! The Prestige! I don't know if that's where you got your inspiration, but that's what I thought of when I saw it: -) Well done!
Hey Gloria. Great poem, few words that say everything. I liked it a lot. You should become a writer. I would buy your books. =)
First things first, I like the poem; makes me want to serously kick some guy's boo-tae! ! ! ! ! Second, who the heck does Jane Tevar? ? ? She honestly needs to be more sensitive about your feelings, Gloria. lol sooooo anywho.... The poem was great, stanza was short, and I have a feeling you had me read this in class. Cause I swear I've seen it somewhere. You've got the tone perfect for this, and the expectance of the reader is hanging onto your every word. Quite, quite bravo, my dear.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Not today and maybe, just maybe...not tomorrow.