Obedient To The Time Poem by Daniel Brick

Obedient To The Time

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We know all about those lost ages
dogging a time of glory, when darkness
descends suddenly like a winter twilight
over a pale landscape, and we witness
even the heartiest hope can manage
only two last breaths and then is stilled.
And so we become reluctant carriers
of both grief and darkness. We try to escape
but find the way blocked by other griefs
and deeper darkness...

We must be obedient to the time
into which we are thrust, with no
regard for our readiness or willingness.
What great-souled ancestors can be
our models? Who among us will recognize
the glimmer of radiance before it fades
forever from view? What prophetic voice
is left to galvanize our remaining vigor?

I fear the god of this world is abandoning
his creation. He has been glimpsed walking
awkwardly down the corridors of spent time,
muttering,
HAD I KNOWN THIS THEN, THERE WOULD BE NO NOW.
He cradles a new-born lamb in his folded arms,
as he crosses the threshold of the world.
One person, perhaps reliable, swears
she saw him turn and look over his shoulder,
and the twist his whole frame, and look
long and hard into the world he was leaving.

II

I feel life slipping out of me,
as the god withdraws his sustaining
strength. Is this the sway of a new
NIHIL overtaking my mind? But my Will
asserts itself against the very thought
of an exhausted creation. I cannot assess
my present condition. It's as if I stood
in the eye of a storm, calm and unafraid,
as clouds of fiery energy circle around
and over me. Or is that just a projection,
my mind is stunned by the absence of
our departed god? It might be a Lucid Dream
of vast proportions from which I shall
awake a new man, almost a man ready
to play the role of a god. Perhaps this is
the moment of the Phoenix, whose mantle
I will assume. The fire subsides. I see
people like myself, scattered across
the scorched landscape. Like me,
they seem ready and capable...
From the few remaining charred trees,
a flock of orange birds are singing brightly.

Sunday, July 16, 2017
Topic(s) of this poem: apocalypse
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Glen Kappy 21 July 2017

daniel, this may seem a weird jump in thought or connection, but the feeling i get in this poem and things from your mantra poem make me think of abram's vision in genesis 15. it's actually a covenant ceremony and hopeful it its outcome, but a great darkness first descends on him. a long while ago in my own life i noticed that from the stories we have of him it was years between abraham's divine encounters. most of his life was lived between. but he stands out as one who held fast to what he learned in those moments of clarity and trusted God for his security, his life, hard as it was at times. (i'm relating these things to your mantra poem.) obedient to the time... i'm not sure it's what you intend, but grief, for example, is something that naturally enough weighs on us. no sense trying to throw off that mantle put on us- no sense, at least, once we have lived enough to gain some perspective on it, knowing we will go on and that grief too will take its place among all the experiences that shape us, that make us the humans we are. even as i say this though, i think of things that might come our way that throw us for a loop, to use a common expression, that may have no analogs in our lives to that point. what if... not knowing what they may be, we can't prepare for them. i can think of nothing better for this fruitless imagination than jesus' words, sufficient to the day is the evil thereof. and paul, inspired by the holy spirit as i understand it, assures us nothing will come our way that God will not provide what we need for it. ah! we are experiencing progressive decrepitude as we age. another thing comforts me, which i reread just recently, paul saying, when i am weak, then i am strong- for God shines clearly, is best recognized, in our weakness. glen

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Bharati Nayak 18 July 2017

Perhaps this is the moment of the Phoenix, whose mantle I will assume. The fire subsides. I see people like myself, scattered across the scorched landscape. Like me, they seem ready and capable... From the few remaining charred trees, a flock of orange birds are singing brightly. The poem, though written with the imagery of apocalypse, speaks of 'undying spirit of life' No death can wipe it completely.The good things, the love, the sunshine will always be there to create the earth anew.No, we will never bow before the dark forces- - -A FLOCK OF ORANGE BIRDS SINGING BRIGHTLY- - - - - - - -

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Nosheen Irfan 17 July 2017

You have presented the concept of apocalypse so wonderfully that reader is awe-struck. Time is a cruel thing, the real enemy of man from which there is no escape. I have always been fascinated by this concept because somewhere in all of us lies a dread of the impending doom and the happenings of the world don't do much to quell our fears. Whether a poet writes about sunny things or dark things, he has to convey the feelings effectively and you always do that. A big 10.

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