Remorseful Dog Poem by Titus Keya Omwaka

Remorseful Dog

Rating: 4.7


Although my head has been hard like a log
I come to you like a remorseful dog
So humble
And my feet tremble
Even though I have gone astray
Please show me the way

I'm not ready to battle loneliness.
Please whisper a word of forgiveness.
I regret taking you for granted
My tail is in between my legs
Hold me the way clothes are done by pegs
Don't let me go


I didn't want to write in black
Because our love will crack
I never wanted to write in red
Because our love will fade
That's why I wrote in blue
Because I love you

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
A person is pleading with the lover to forgive them and take them back
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
David Wood 24 June 2023

I hope she throws you a bone.

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Titus Keya Omwaka 27 June 2023

she still hasn't

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Bri Edwards 25 June 2023

'Definition of WITH ONE'S TAIL BETWEEN ONE'S LEGS: with a feeling of being embarrassed or ashamed especially because one has been defeated' AND 'When a dog has its tail tucked between its legs, it usually means that something about its surroundings is making it uncomfortable.'

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Bri Edwards 25 June 2023

Titus, I was attracted by your title, enjoyed the story, the rhymes, and especially the last line from each stanza, which, written in order, would make a GOOD 3-line stanza in another poem.

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Bri Edwards 27 June 2023

Titus, I plan to use this in my upcoming July 2023 'Showcase'. For years, usually each month, I've collected some of my most-enjoyed (from other PH poets) poems. For my July showcase, I'm using poems from new-to-me poets. Questions? bri : )

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Bri Edwards 25 June 2023

I think your use of 'them' is correct in the Poet's Notes, since you used 'A person', not 'She' or 'He'. : ) IF you'd begun with 'He', I'd use 'him' & if you'd begun with 'She', I'd use 'her'.

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Bri Edwards 25 June 2023

Well, the poem seemed clear enough that your Poet's Notes was not needed, but.............THANKS FOR IT anyway.

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Bri Edwards 25 June 2023

i GIVE THIS 5 stars.

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Titus Keya Omwaka 27 June 2023

Thanks a bunch

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Bri Edwards 25 June 2023

'Hold me the way clothes are done by pegs'....supplied a nice rhyme and was very creative. I think, however, that at times, my wife might wish to hang me from a peg, by/with a noose around my neck! : )

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