thomas coltrin

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she takes 10 Poem by thomas coltrin


She takes one
She takes two
She take three, she can’t breathe
She takes four
She takes five
She takes six, she can’t think
She takes seven
She takes eight
She take nine, she knows she can die
But it doesn’t matter because of what she is inside
She looks around and still tries to try
But the feelings she has are starting to die
Because of this thing she has an addiction
She can’t even stop when she’s in restriction,
She talks on the phone she loves him so much
Looks through the window and starts to cry
Knowing she doesn’t deserve a guy like that,
A tear falls out with out a doubt
Seeing the tear dropp she sees inside
Of this little tear that’s been falling down
A memory that her and this love had made
Slowly going away in despair,
Walking alone it’s the middle of the night
She thinks she doesn’t deserve to have a life
Thinks of her parents and the night they died
She wants to know, and asks the question why
Why is she the only one alive?
Thinking of the memories she has left in her mind
On the street by her self she tries to survive
Working the corner she doesn’t have money
To pay her rent, she tries with a smile
She sits on her bed every night in denial
Talking to someone she thinks is their
But knowing that everything just in the head,
Seeing the light she’s finally awake
But knowing it’s just another waste of a day
Waking up to the same thing every day
Looking behind her she’s always afraid
That something by accident somehow will change
And she will always be sitting on her bed in regret,
Going to a party she walks up these hills
In her heart she finally she finally feels
But it’s somehow too late with a bag of pills
Looks in the bag she freezes still
Takes one out she puts it in her hand
She takes ten,
Amazed by the feeling that she’s finally dead

Submitted: Thursday, February 5, 2009

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  • Rookie Iron Panda 23™ (4/12/2010 4:50:00 PM)

    o.o
    so i think that.....this was.....
    sooooo friffin gooood! ! ! ! ! ....sad but i dont care xP (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Rachel Blank (3/6/2009 8:07:00 PM)

    wow, that's a really good, yet sad story in poem form....i'll keep reading more of your poems. :) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Brian Jefferson (2/27/2009 5:06:00 PM)

    This poem is just amazing to me. Continue to write because you definitely know what you are doing with that pen. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Jim Norausky (2/27/2009 11:13:00 AM)

    I read all your poems and think this is your best work. A sad story though. You have a lot of talent and I hope you keep writing. Proof reading your work would add to their value. All the best. Jim (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Danielle Vincenzi (2/26/2009 12:28:00 AM)

    This is my favourite poem of yours. Its so real like your there with her your imagry is amazing. Good job. =] (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Christine Kerr (2/24/2009 1:43:00 AM)

    I really enjoyed this poem. you could feel her sadness and had no idea until the end, what she was counting. Very creative (Report) Reply

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