Today is the day
I wanted so much to say
Thanks for the tears
Thanks for the fears
Thank you for so many lost years
Thanks for the pain
Thanks for the black and blue affection
Thanks for the debt
Thank you for all the times you lost a bet
Thank you for causing so much strife
And last but not least.....
Thank you for taking my life.
I did not like this poem. It seems very rushed and the rhymes are forced. It seems like there is a story to be told here, but it's not told at all.
I really like this poem. In a way i can relate to it. I think you are a very talented writer. maybe I can learn alot from you.. ;)
The couplets add a lot to the sarcasm of this; good choice. Your first stanza is a lot stronger than your second, but a good attempt. A bit vague; feel free to email me if you wanna talk about it.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
this poem has an unexplained and sudden theme, i think you need more description, but good attempt