The First Poem Of A Mixed Mind Poem by lochlan packer

The First Poem Of A Mixed Mind

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As i see the past.
i wait here at the shore my dear.
for you i would go to the ends of the earth.
for with our love i shall not show fear.

when i look at you i see serenity.
So sweet and pretty is your kind heart.
For when i am with you i feel apart of eternity,
so now my love i shall risk all for you or be torn apart.

now that all is said and Done.
So now all i ask from you is for your love.
for the darkness that haunts me i will not succumb.
so now you know how i feel what shall you do now my dear.

you know i shall wipe away every tear.
as my mind drifts to the edge.
my love will forever draw near.
that to make you feel loved and special this i pledge.

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
ok so this is my first poem sure it may not be the best but i've been trying to write poems for a little while starting with my girlfriend so i hope. This is good enough for readers ^_^
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Gajanan Mishra 09 February 2013

I shall wipe away every tear. wonderful. i like it. I invite you to read my poems and comment.

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Hardik Vaidya 09 February 2013

Lochlan, what I loved and appreciated is the grasp of the concept of fear. If you understand the imposter in it, you will revel in the joys of writing. Write without fear, and write your heart out, such that I the reader can see it beating on my mind every solitary shout.

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