In a gunshot second
A swift nurse swoops in
An authoritative swish of curtains
A rapid set of neuro observations
As firm fingers turn your jaw
And prise your eyes
Sheets rip back
A quick flip and wound check
You're thoroughly probed
With a nod of cyber sympathy
Gone with a flick of a switch
But the gentle and comforting touch and presence of an angelic nurse will be deeply missed! I cannot think of human beings replaced by robots, at least in some areas where human emotions are involved! Simone, you have beautifully envisioned the future scenario! A huge 10
i forgot to mention: i enjoyed swift/swoops and cyber/sympathy and i see a second and swish in the mix! bri :) i like alliterationssssssssssssssssssss
You have a good imagination and a predictor as well as rhythmic poetry writer... Nice to see you still writing Simone, keep writing :) be well be fresh always :)
Prise = Pries i guess. (thanks to Google) : Definition of prise in English: prise (US prize) verb 1with object and adverbial of direction Use force in order to move, move apart, or open (something) ‘I tried to prise Joe's fingers away from the stick’ 1.1prise something out of/from Obtain something from (someone) with effort or difficulty. ‘I got the loan, though I had to prise it out of him’ Origin Late 17th century: from dialect prise ‘lever’, from Old French prise ‘grasp, taking hold’. Compare with pry. Pronunciation prise/prʌɪz/ - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - but instead of bullets, laser burns. instead of curtains, opaque force fields. sheets? maybe. favorite lines: With a nod of cyber sympathy Gone with the flick of a switch ..................will R-9 wear lipstick at least! ? and you should be retired by then. :) :) bri :)
A quick flip and wound check You're thoroughly probed With a nod of cyber sympathy Gone with a flick of a switch.Future prospects in the hospitals. very good poem. your imagination. tony
I feel weak at the knees at the mere thoughts of a robotic nurse, way too impersonal and swishing for my Irish soul I'd rather have you any day Simone Excellent poem it really captures the R nurse so well. Hope I'll be gone by then Cyber sympathy wow! ! !
In a gunshot second- - - - - - - - - - - - - - -Now that is putting words together to make a very visual and auditory image for your readers! swoops in- - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - -A doctorate in 2 words, the verb choise speaks volumes about the action and the nurse who does not creep in, glide in, stagger in, NO, this nurse SWOOPS in and you give the reader in these 2 words the mental image of a being of quick decisions, an aloof being, a rather predator being, a very dominant being who does not question her/his/its decisions An authoritative swish of curtains- - - - - - - - - - - - - - - ] Ha! I cower in the bed when they do that! ! ! ! Excellent painter of the scene- -more like the director of the action clips in a movie! ! ! ! There is more I could wax all gleeful about but you know what you're doing and don't need to hear me rattle on.... but, dang, you're a good writer! ! ! ! ! ! ! 10++++++++++++++++++++++
Luckily I will not be around by that time! Thanks for sharing Inez-10
Beautiful poem having nice envision. Enjoyed. Thanks for sharing.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Simone, this is absolutely brilliant. I can see that the nurse of the future may have a few things in common with the care-giver of the present. This is a great work, Simone.