Reason A. Poteet


Writer's Block - Poem by Reason A. Poteet

a reasonnet*

A'waiting once more the wonders at dawn,
a tired, empty muse paces the lawn
struck dumb by notions refusing to spawn.
The new day arrives but dark does not lift,
an overcast sky now leaves her short shrift
as lab'rers head home from serving night shift.
Some fifteen young bards pass her toiling there
speaking but speeding away from her care
to places of rest, to places of prayer.
Five run to the woods, four break to a stroll,
three watch a mare giving birth to a foal,
two quarrel and bicker, one friend bares his soul.
All busy with life these bards quickly pen
scores of sonnets read again and again.

A reasonnet is my private version of the sonnet form with the rhyming pattern, aaa, bbb, ccc, ddd, ee


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Comments about Writer's Block by Reason A. Poteet

  • Gold Star - 12,159 Points Bri Edwards (11/12/2014 12:28:00 AM)

    short shrift
    noun
    noun: short shrift

    rapid and unsympathetic dismissal; curt treatment.
    the judge gave short shrift to an argument based on the right to free speech
    archaic
    little time between condemnation and execution or punishment.
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    PERHAPS you are using the archaic definition? i hope you don't die from 'writer's block'!
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    i like it so far, but i have a SUGGESTION. in these six lines:

    The new day arrives but dark does not lift,
    an overcast sky now leaves her short shrift.
    As lab’rers head home from serving night shift,
    some fifteen young bards pass her toiling there
    speaking but speeding away from her care
    to places of rest, to places of prayer.

    to ME, it would work better to make the sentence break between shift and some, instead of between shrift and as. and speaking or not speaking?

    is the writer's block-stricken poet attending a school for bards? ? the only place i've KNOWN myself to be around as many as 15 poets, in a short space of time, is here on PH. :)

    and the spawning thing reminds me of fish, which reminds me of food, which reminds me of ice cream, which reminds me that there is none in the house! ! ! yikes!


    i like the story and the rhyming. i shall send it to MyPoemList. thanks for sharing. bri ;)

    p.s. and if it's visits you'd like from other poets on PH, befriend John Westlake. he has some very nice poems and sometimes he seems to like to read a whole slew of poems by the same poet. recently i think he has left me about 30 comments on 30 poems in the space of a week and a half. i can't keep up with him (and do other things i want to do) . (Report) Reply

    Rookie - 100 Points Reason A. Poteet (11/13/2014 6:15:00 AM)

    Thanks, Bri. I did like your suggestion on the placement of the comma break and I've edited the piece accordingly. I guess the spawning comes from the muggy atmosphere surrounding the drowning muse, just wasn't wet enough to produce. A kind of a metaphor for how we all waste time at the desk trying to come up with ideas when we would profit from being out and among mankind.

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, February 6, 2008

Poem Edited: Thursday, November 13, 2014


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